only one thing bugs me, the high demons like Melodas have SEVEN Hearts while normal demons have Five, so you should change that in the first chapter. I also wonder how you will factor in his immortality curse in this, seems pretty good so far
"Years of fighting Barb." She stopped asking me about it as we walked into the town. We walked back the tree house. The girls hadn't come back, and I shrugged my shoulders as I walked into the kitchen. I looked around for stuff to cook dinner. I found all the things I'd need to make a few salads and fried vegs. 'Here hoping.'
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"Years of TRAINING Barb." She stopped asking me about it as we walked into the town. We walked back the tree house. The girls hadn't CAME back, and I shrugged my shoulders as I walked into the kitchen. I looked around for stuff to cook dinner. I found all the things I'd need to make a few salads and fried vegs. 'HERE'S TO hoping.'
9719943 Actually, none of those were wrong. Years of training works just as well as years of fighting. And the other two "corrections" you made were wrong.
Meliodas leaves the town with his new slave.
Thumbs up for yes, down for no
The main six confront Meliodas about not freeing the dragon from the slave marking right away.
Thumbs up for yes, down for no
More Is needed.
Barb is my life now i will to protect her with any means necessary
Cliff hanger but i see it was as entertaining as ever moonking
make more chapters please
only one thing bugs me, the high demons like Melodas have SEVEN Hearts while normal demons have Five, so you should change that in the first chapter. I also wonder how you will factor in his immortality curse in this, seems pretty good so far
Going to start my day with this awesome fanfic!!!
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9719943
Actually, none of those were wrong.
Years of training works just as well as years of fighting. And the other two "corrections" you made were wrong.
This is getting intense
This world needs ass kicking and our MC delivery is here Celestia better watch herself Pretty sure she is responsible for the slave shit.