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This is the story of a man and his destiny and it starts the day he died...and become the gamer!
I do not own anything I use in this story other then the character deltorix, I'm writing this for entertainment so I'm within fair use
Tags will be added when needed, and for those who think this is a self insert it's not deltorix is my OC and his personality is different then mine.
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I am interested what is going to happen now.
Immediately, I'm caught off guard by your description.
So, self-insert, a horrifically generic short summary that reads like one of some of the worst stories from FIMFiction's early days. Yeah, not looking too good so far.
Well, at least this'll be unintentionally hilarious.
Yes, the vast majority of people here are very well acquainted with the function of italics. Now, onto the actual story.
...Okay, since you left me with 0 details of this routine, I'm going to fill in the blank and say that it involves spanking your asshole with a bamboo rod.
Sometimes, I wake up as Lindsay Lohan; thankfully, such is not the case today.
If I had a nickel for every time I said this aloud...
And much like his favorite stories, this one showcases a lack of command of the English language.
I know that this is supposed be sad, but I frankly find it hilarious that this chapter is 10k+ words long and you could only be bothered to give the readers less than two massively rushed paragraphs of his "life" before his displacement.
Wow, he cares so much more about becoming a Mary Sue than the friends and family he's about to leave behind. Swell guy.
*unrolls CVS receipt*
Wow, you really seemed prepared for this...
No, Timothy, you're only allowed to get one POV from the toy store.
Well, now I see where the chapter length comes from...
*gasp* No way, it's the same as your own username!
Good thing he knows how to use those wings he just got that he's never had nor used as a human (yeah, I glanced over the whole "flight is natural to a dragon" thing in your stats, but then again, you're a human who's been a dragon for all of two minutes while every other dragon has been born and lived their lives as dragons, so I'm still calling BS).
I give it two chapters before they bone.
God, trying to sift through these stats and find the actual story is making my eyes bleed.
And there's like no build up to anything. Like literally, you're sitting down with Ember one paragraph and literally one sentence later, you're fighting zombies in some random location.
Yeah, I doubt someone like Ember would just become friends with some random dragon after several barely conversations and a race I doubt she'd even really be into with someone she's known for all of five minutes.
Yeah, this is a chore to read.
9961266
This was hilarious
There's a Self-Insert tag, you know.
There's nothing else I can really add that Moviemaster didn't already tear into, but OC =/= Self-Insert.
For someone who doesn't write; I'd like to say this wasn't too bad for a first attempt
This is miserably bad. Borders on the verge of hilariously bad. Just... stop. Learn how to pace, learn basic grammar, learn how to write a good, compelling character, and don't make a gamer-falls-into-Equestria story. They're all bad and have been done before. Show what you can being to the table that's new.
May I know how you have done the stats? I never understood how people done the vertical lines as such. A reply with the code you use would be even better. Thanks for reading the comment.
I don't really care but I'm reading this to waste time for new chapters of other fanfics.
Don't get me wrong i like this story but it needs more.
I think you need to read other gamer fanfics and use that as a guide😁😁😁😁😁😁
9961804 Nothing too complex.
The lines are how quotes appear on stories now, (|quote||/quote|) and then he used a centered-indentation (|center||/center|) and used the color wheel to change the text color(|color=#6aaadd||/color|).
(Excluding the brackets so it doesn’t activate the code and I can show you what it’s supposed to look like)
9962952
The author was kind enough to show me trick already. Still, thanks for wanting to help
9963084 Ah, must’ve PMed you.
9963137
Yep
Alright, I'm gonna come out and say it, who the heck is the gamer? Is it a new anime or something, because it feels like there's been a lot of fanfics revolving around someone having that person's powers recently. Also, why do people want gamer powers? Is there an end goal for the leveling system that allows the person to get like three wishes if they beat the game of life or something, or is there no point in leveling besides getting stronger? I'm genuinely curious as to why this is happening.
9963403
Look up The Gamer on webtoon, it's a comic
9963407
Thank you.
9963403
Nope, he just comes from a webcomic called “the gamer” there is no real goal except to live a life in the abbyss.
9963608
it is a nifty concept, but I believe there hasn't been any derivative yet.
on here, is mostly the same thing, but "with ponez" or in equestria
elswhere not even that. it is litterally the same thing as the original, but with less korean reference.
on the story itself: far too many data charts. it is not a comic, is a written story, we do not need to have big interruption every few lines
the charather ones are pretty intrusive, especially the
"this is my chart untill the battle"
but now I got a single point
"so this is my new complete stats"
you cold cut wasted space by having one chart at the top, and one at the bottom, with the changes only being talked about and not actually shown
the POV changes a bit too heavily handed. personally, I would suggest to have the first person for the protagonist, and a third person for every other
9962619
To be real, I was doing the same until I found this story pretty good, and that's saying something as I don't really like most 'The gamer' fanfictions on here that I have seen
"Let's you make instant dungeons"
What? He didn't do anything??
9963407
Hello fellow displaced writer!
I really like the story, keep up the good work.
Can’t wait for chapter two.
UwU, I’m the uwuneitor I leave UwUs in every gamer fic
UwU
9961316
Why the fuck don't people do this for my stories?
Oh, your character Prince Auryn? He's just you turned into a foal alicorn gary stu with psychic powers. He wanted to be a unicorn but there was an accident. Oh, and in some stories he hates the princesses because they won't leave him alone; he just wants to live a quiet life without all that fate and destiny crap. Oh, and when he was human his parents tried to sell him to the Government because of his psychic powers; due to said powers he nearly killed said parents in an accident. So there's that oh-so-tragic back story. Oh, and he's immortal, too, due to exposure to huge amounts of psychic energy over time; for every twenty normal years he ages only one year -- also he had to train with his powers to get as good as he is; over 75 years worth of training, a lifetime, no special treatment but nah, he's just a gary stu who had everything given to him, yep, nothing to see here.
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
9977294
It will probably be some time before chapter two, Deltorix probably has to work on the stats, monster, new characters, skills, and much more.
I’m very interested in this please continue
Looking forward to the next chapter.
this is cool a dragon gamer displaced. I will follow for more
9971591
its a pain when people only see the powers, and not the work needed to master them.
9961266
For some reason, I get the feeling that your summary is probably way more entertaining than the actual story. So thanks for providing it. ;]
Oh, you did muck one thing up - he did ask for basic flight and fire-breath knowledge before getting to Equestria, and it got approved. So yeah, with that in there he basically had flight capability the millisecond he popped up.
9971591
For the record, Sues/Stu-s can be hella entertaining, but they have to be used right. For some, that's deconstruction (there's that little story here that ends its opener with "Help me, I'm a Gary Stu." (or something like that)). For others, it's comedy (turning away unwanted attention and/or advances, for instance). Going "over 9000" on shit, on a wild rampage of infinite escalation to just rank up the awesome to DBZ levels is also acceptable. ;] Sorta 'Duke Nukem' but with actual funny content and not as much obnoxious shit.
Hay man when are you going to to Mack your next chapter?
Plan on continuing this?
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
9961266
Very enjoyable to read, 10/10.
10100258 You must be new to Displaced stories.
Does anyone know with who crossover is?
Really liked chapter, tho his four guards were Abit, off? Need to reread last chapter so maybe that will explain some things, anyhow look forward to next chapter but take care of yourself first, life first, and story wherever on the list
10206864
The Darksiders crossover is my story Four Housemen Come to Equestria
Nice job, The wait was worth it to read this chapter. Can’t wait for the next one
The new red "dark Magician " pic is better look for him than the purple one.
10258165
Thanks and if anyone is wondering he is from a earth where yugi's dark magician was red
9964994
It will be explained later but it has to do with dragon culture
love it 10/10
maybe cool it with the crossovers at least until you get the story going a good way threw
just some friendly advise
10263470
There's two more planed but both have a bit to do with my characters growth or some parts of the story that is going to come to play later
10263490
sigh fine just try to make it less jarring please i had a hard time following this
i have high hopes for this story
The summoning was kinda meh to me. Interesting, but I really didn't see much of a point to it... He didn't really do anything, I thought being summoned was to somehow help in fighting something to save people, but I guess he did give the others training?
I don't know just feels like it was unneeded... I did like the rest of the story though, nightmare night was good to see... And I did enjoy the band idea.
The story does feel like it jumps around a lot though... kinda liked the "I'll make a dermatic exit" and then "special dungeon, oh no" lol...
All that being said I've been enjoying the story for what it is. Its pretty cool to see a dragon run around doing things, and The Gamer skill is just OP so its cool to see it being used too... I always liked the idea of Leveling Up.