Astra inclinant, sed non obligant.
She's Captain Twilight Sparkle, a mare that goes through thick and thin like getting a daisy sandwich from the fridge. The perfect way to start her morning is by initiating the wake-up call. Pinkie Pie gave her a bugle after all, and she would really hate to disappoint.
She plays and she remembers.
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Nice first story. Welcome to the site.
Damn, this is really good. Full of feels, well written, and with some interesting backstory.
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Thanks! I'm glad to finally be here. Glad you liked it.
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Thank you both! I admit I was a bit anxious when trying to get this published and on the web. Hopefully another one will squeeze out of me soon.
What happened to Shining Armor anyway though?
Is he dead? Disappeared? Fallen into a Rift between worlds perhaps?
Let us know!
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I am thinking about writing a full out story on this, but it's coming along slowly, with only a few chapters. Shining Armor's not dead nor lost in the rift between worlds.
He's merely busy at the moment and cannot perform his duties as BBBFF. Whatever that may mean.
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Thank you! It means a lot to me that you think it's good.
Well, this has been a nice read, though there is still some room for improvement. The reminiscing part during the Reveille was very well written in terms of feelings and atmosphere. However, the rest of the story was quite execution-heavy, as well as rather random. At first I thought you did that on purpose to try and balance out the sad parts, but then I found out there is no ‘Comedy’ tag, so now I’m assuming it wasn’t intentional.
To sum it up, very nice first story. However, try to consider more carefully which information is relevant at the moment and which can be mentioned later in the story or even fully omitted. The same goes for certain jokes and actions that might steer the story’s atmosphere away from the desired impact.
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Honestly, I'm just really unable to write anything angsty. It just strikes a nerve I can't seem to take away, so some parts are random for my feelings.
This was more of a test into the waters of this AU, I don't really know if I'm gonna dive into this much. Thanks anyways, I'll be sure to pay more attention to the stuff if I go into this seriously.