Closing Act: A Dying Promise
CLOSING ACT
Twilight pulled a mega all-nighter in her royal library. She combed through every book she had looking up the curse Chrysalis had cast on Courier, and much to her disappointment, it really did look hopeless. “I don’t believe this!” she cried as she peered through the last pages.
“What’s wrong?” asked Starlight.
“There really is no known cure for this curse.” answered Twilight “Courier was right-- if we try to break the curse on him, he really will die.”
Starlight’s blood ran cold.
Spike was outside the doors to the library, “Man! That’s just rotten. It means he really will never be able to feel romance.”
The ladies felt extremely upset for Courier.
“Is he still in jail?” asked Spike.
Twilight nodded, “But my brother and Cadance and are actually trying to work on a pardon for him. They’re trying to convince many ponies not to press charges against him, but I doubt it’ll work.”
Cadance and Shining Armor were gathering signatures in a petition to help Courier. They got loads of signatures from all the couples that Courier helped, and there were lots of couples.
More than half of Ponyville was in love thanks to him, and even though the crushes now realized who really wrote those letters, they didn’t care, really! Courier helped them open their eyes and give their dates and crushes a try which helped them become closer than ever.
Then again, there were also the ponies that were still outraged at Courier for parting their manes and publicly humiliating them.
“I say burn him at the stake!”
“Hang him by his neck!”
“Throw him in a pit of hungry dragons!”
Cadance and Shining Armor were infuriated, and though they understood the ponies had every right to be angry, “You brought this on yourselves!” Shining scolded them.
Cadance agreed, “Look at yourselves! You coldly rejected dates who liked you without even giving them a legitimate chance, and you laughed at and teased those who had no dates!
While I cannot approve of Courier’s actions, I think you all ought to be ashamed of yourselves!”
Some of the ponies did feel ashamed, but the rest were unmoved, and in the end, they still would not sign the petition.
“Never mind them,” said Shining Armor “Maybe we have enough as it is.”
Unfortunately, all their efforts were in vain. The police just couldn’t let Courier out, no matter how many ponies petitioned. “We cannot let emotional understandings affect our legal duties.” said the captain “The law is the law. I’m sorry, but that’s that. Even you have no authority in this, Princess.”
The couple felt upset, and Courier called to them from his jail cell, “I told you not to bother!” he scolded “And even if you got me out of here, it won’t be any better because of the curse, and even more so, everyone knows who I am. Many of them wish to hunt me down and cut me into pieces, the same way I did to their manes!
I have nothing to gain either way!”
“No!” Cadance said approaching the cell.
“Cadance!” cried Shining Armor.
Cadance looked right into the cell at the miserable pony, “I told you, we’re not going to give up on you! We want to help!”
Finally, Courier lost his patience, and he stood up and slowly began to approach her, “There is one thing you can do for me.”
“What’s that?”
Then, quick as a wink, Courier leapt over, reaching through the bars, and grabbed her by the neck and held her against the bars tightly. All at once, the curse began to shock them both horribly, and they both screamed and yelled in pain!
“CADANCE!!” cried Shining Armor.
“STOP THIS!!” shouted the Captain, and fired a magic blast from his horn, blasting Courier back into his cell.
Cadance fell to the ground feeling weak and tired. Her alicorn strength and magic kept her strong.
Her husband caught her as she fell, but Courier was still being shocked by the power from touching Cadance for so long, and he wasn’t as strong as Cadance was!
“COURIER…!!” Cadance cried, but it was already too late. The shocking had blasted him so hard, and he was vaporized into a pile of dust on the floor of the cell.
“Sweet Celestia!” murmured the captain. He and the couple were devastated by what just happened, but regardless… Courier was gone.
“I can’t believe he did that.” said Shining Armor.
Tears fell down Cadance’s face.
The couple saw no choice by to return to Twilight’s Castle, and you can bet, everyone was devastated to hear of what happened.
“He just up and killed himself?!” cried Rarity “How could he do such a thing?”
Shining Armor sighed “I guess he was just too upset and too miserable to carry on-- living all that time and not being able to love anyone. I don’t think I could live with myself either.”
Twilight felt very upset. “He wouldn’t even let us try to help him.”
“Poor guy.” said Starlight.
Cadance felt the most upset, feeling it was her fault. In some ways it ways, “I should never have gotten near him. I should’ve remembered he’d get hurt.”
“It’s not your fault.” said Rainbow “He was the one who grabbed you. You didn’t make him do it.”
Knowing this did not make Cadance feel any better. “That’s only part of it.” she said “The friendship mission… it’s failed.”
Her husband suddenly remembered, “That’s right, we did blow it.”
No one could say anything to argue with that.
“You tried your best.” said Twilight.
Cadance’s features hardened, but not in anger, but in determination. “I’m going to continue Courier’s work.”
“What?” Spike said. The others all felt the same as they gawked at her.
“Not like that,” replied Cadance “I’m not going to put on a costume and prowl, but Courier inspired me. As the element of Love and Joy, I should help other ponies with their love problems. I can help them to realize and give many a chance, and if others are going through a rough time I can console them, and question those who are wronging them without punishment.”
Everyone seemed to like the idea, and Shining Armor agreed to help her every step of the way.
A few weeks later, long after the royal family returned to the, Crystal Empire, Cadance well carried out her promise. In addition to her royal duties, she counseled couples or potential couples and tried to work out their problems, and even asked those to write her letters, almost like how Princess Celestia used to ask for Friendship Reports.
The mail piled up like crazy, and yet she spent endless hours going through them, while at the same time doing her other work and taking care of her baby too.
“Maybe you should take a break.” Shining Armor suggested.
“I can’t,” said Cadance “I promised I’d help these ponies, and I meant it. I owe it that much… to Courier.”
Her husband understood, and admired her devotion, “Just the same… you should rest.” And he covered her with a blanket, and watched as she fell asleep at her desk. He pecked her warmly on her head, and then went off with Flurry to let Cadance sleep.
Still, even Shining himself couldn’t stop thinking of Courier. “I guess that’s just sometimes how it ends.”
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This was a pretty tragic story. And I agree with Courier in way, on not wanting to date Violet, even if she changed, it too late.
A simple sorry, or confessing to the wrongdoings done to him won't change anything.
Some scars last forever.
Pissed off Chrysalis got away with what she did, ruining his life forever, just as expected from the love parasite.
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The Courier and Violet thing was inspired by a true story, of a girl getting revenge on a bully who asked her out.
https://www.bustle.com/articles/52470-woman-writes-a-revenge-letter-to-her-bully-after-he-asks-her-out-eight-years-later
(No surprises, my haters are being assholes again with their down-votes) Pathetic, not to mention hypocritical since they keep yaking at me that they won't care if I ever change. "You did it int he first place, now repent"
...nice to see them crapping on their own sayings
so many dislikes, sorry bruh the disliked story you have, You got ma symphathy
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Thanks... and if you want... check this out... I'm calling the dislikers out on their stupidity...
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/845368/riffing-the-end-of-ends-riffers
After finishing this story, I can say this is genuinely one of the better ones. Courier's problem is a serious one , he tries to make the best of his situation by using his curse to help other ponies and he doesn’t blame others for things that aren’t their faults (hello Helper Soul) .
One could argue that he was rather harsh towards Violet but then again, he has no obligation to forgive her. Still it’s good to see that she tried and succeeded in becoming a better pony. When I first hear about the restraining order I assumed she was secretly some kind of crazy stalker and not a regretful former bully. Which also begs the question how Courier was able to get that restraining order in the first place if she hasn’t done anything that would justify it.
I also felt that his death was a bit unsatisfying. Courier suddenly gives up and does a suicide by cops is a bit strange considering that he was living with this curse for quite a while now. Maybe it was the fear of spending the rest of his life in prison. but that would’ve been very unlikely. After all, this is Equestria we’re talking about. A place where a pony who formed a cult and create several horrible alternative timelines got away with what’s basically a slap on the wrist. So I’m finding it hard to believe that a guy whose worst crime was to temporarily inconvenience ponies by running their manes would be locked up. Community service seems far more likely.
There’s also the fact that Ponyville has no police force. We’ve seen cops in Manhattan, royal guards in Canterlot and a sheriff in Appaloosa. But not one single law enforcement officer in Ponyville during eight seasons. Which makes sense, considering it’s a small little town where everypony knows everypony. So I guess either the mayor or Twilight would be the local law enforcment. Considering that Twilight was the one who “sentenced” Starlight I can’t imagine why she couldn’t be the one judging Courier, too.
It also seems odd that Twilight would sinoky give up after just one day. It’s more likely that she would’ve continued to try finding a solution or maybe even trying to research a cure for the curse. Perhaps try contacting Thorax and the reformed Changelings, if they know something. I don’t think the story necessarily needed a good ending with his curse being broken but I feel like there should’ve been a better explanation than “Can’t be undone. Point!”.
The ending, however, I liked. Cadence trying to continue his work felt like an appropriate bitter sweet ending.
So to sum this story I up: I liked the character of Courier and the curse was an interesting idea. Ponyville having a police force felt odd and such a harsh punishment seems extremely unlikely. Violet was an interesting character but I would’ve seen a bit more of her, like her reaction to Courier's death. There should’ve been a better explanation of the curse and why it’s so hard to break. The ending was good and I liked that it was rather bittersweet.
So as I said, this is one of the better Friendship is Failure story and I'm giving it a thumbs up. I hope future Friendship is Failure characters are more like Courier and less like Helper Soul.
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Um... he blamed Cadance.
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It said she WAS following him around and constantly asking to date him! (seriously... can't you people read?!)
the penalty for harassment in real life can be up to 12 years in county jail.
As for Courier's death, I was running out of word space for the entire fic, had to kill him off quickly. He was going to die no matter what.
Because Twilight is not a LAWFUL or POLITICAL Princess. she does not truly make laws, run the country or collect taxes. She is not a REAL Princess... it is just an honorary title
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Your failure to your read is staggering! Twilight never said she was giving up, she said she couldn't find a known cure, and even if she could, I'm not giving her the chance... COURIER WILL DIE!! end of story!
Even small counties have sheriffs, police, and jail houses.
Some curses are one-way deals. Once they're cast... that's it!
Don't hold your breath... Courier was a wimp, and didn't scold Cadance and Twilight enough... he deserved to die for showing how weak he is!
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Yes, but he genuinely believed that it was Cadance fault that he was cursed. And once he learnt that it was Chrysalis who was responsible he stopped blaming her for it. Also being cursed to either never find true love or die is also a very good reason to be upset. If he was holding a grudge against her for not going to the prom with him or eating the last cucumber sandwich in the school cafeteria it would be a different matter.
All she said was that she was trying to talk to him and tell him how she feels. That hardly sounds like a stalker to me.
True, but that’s usually for the most serious offenders. Again, all Courier did was ruin the manes of others. He didn’t beat them up or anything like that.
Also Equestria isn’t the real world. For all we know their laws are different. We’ve seen people getting away with a slap on the wrist for far worse crimes. So I seriously doubt that he would’ve even gone to jail.
That's not how it works in the show. Twilight is pretty much a real princess and not a honorary one. Nowhere is it said that you have to run a country or collect taxes to be a real princess. I don’t think taxes were even mentioned in the show, so for all we know taxes don't exist in Equestria.
And when Celestia und Luna disappeared at the start of Season 4, Twilight was put in charge and not someone like Blueblood. This all makes it pretty obvious that she's a real princess and has some authority even if she’s not ruling anything.
Again, this is not the real world and things in Equestria may be different. Even in the real world not every town has a sheriff or police department. Yes each county has one, but a county usually includes several towns and cities.
So the guards in Canterlot are probably the ones responsible for maintaining the law in Ponyville. They don’t have a presences in the town because there’s isn’t much crime going on but would respond to a (for the lack of a better word) call. The Season 8 final seems to support this since Neighsayer arrives with Luna, Celestia and ton of Royal Guards from Canterlot but not a single police officer.