So I'm just your average pony!
When an attack leaves the kingdom of Equestria in a state of shock, Twilight and her friends try to search for answers but nothing they find nor what the royal guard find can help them. All their explanations do is lead to void answers. Thankfully a pony named Sherlock might have all the answers the help they require.
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He has such a fun attitude. Can't wait for him to try to use logic to understand pinkie.
Well, you got me hooked. You really nailed Sherlock's character.
Interesting fic, i do love Sherlock Holmes, it's just a bit sad that ALL Sherlock Holmes in Equestria fics i have read he have always been a pony, just once it would be fun for him to still be human.
Cool! Something interesting.
Can't wait for more
This is the first sherlock fic i have read and this is very interesting. And i must say you are doing a very good Homes character, well done.
Update! Pls
Yes more please
This is glorious.
The spaces after each opening quotation mark are distracting, there are some mispelled words and lots of missing punctuation marks, some paragraphs need to be split into smaller ones, and typically quotes end with commas if it's followed by a verbal verb.
Plus, there's not much effort done to describe the setting of the story. I don't even know what the mansion, Sherlock's apartment or the garden in Canterlot even looks like, and because you don't add detail relating to them it just seems like these characters are interacting in some sketchy background. And a side effect of the lack of proper setting description is that the pacing seems rushed,
Heck, from the story itself I hardly know who these characters are or what they look like. I know there are people who watched Sherlock (including me) and know the characters already, but a story is driven by how much the reader cares for the character and his/her pursuit for success. If someone who never watched Sherlock read this story, they'd get that Sherlock is a mad genius who can make extremely detailed deductions from simple observations, but that's the only character trait they'll recognize.
They'll have no idea why Sherlock is even trying to solve this crime, who John Watson is and why he's tagging along with Sherlock, and what's Sherlock's relationship with different people and the world around him.
It doesn't all have to be explicit; these things can be implied in the most subtle of ways.
Don't get me wrong, the story itself is promising and I really like Sherlock's deductions. But these problems just keep me from fully enjoying the story like you intend. This story is honestly better than many more amatuer stories I've seen on this site, and it's just a couple of fixes away from being excellent.
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lol circle-jerking?
Genuinely enjoyable plot so far, a bit more effort on punctuation would be appreciated, spot on portrayal of S, I'll be watching you.
These chapters, I like them.
*smashes computer*
ANOTHER!
I would like more please
Ok, I'm hooked. Not too shabby with Sherlock's personality. Though there are some grammar mistakes that need correcting. Looking forward to Ch.6.