"Being valuable"... that has a whole lot of interpretations. I'd like to hear if the street sweeping business he worked for wound up falling apart with him gone, because it sounds like he's had a fairly unimportant life up to this point.
Unless it isn't referring to the importance of what he does in and of himself, but as a part of something larger. That isn't much of a talent, though... all lives influence others and change the direction they go, making everyone objectively valuable.
First Prize is a great main character, his shyness is adorable and when he has built his confidence he will be an amazing stallion. Until then Rock Solid is also a good pair for him, he is confident and strong and I love how they have almost a buddy-cop relationship. I do hope you incorporate Raven a bit more into this fic as well, her bitchy exterior obviously is up for fun even without the sex.
This is becoming very good. I am really enjoying this fic!
You friend. First story on the site and it's golden! I love watching First blunder around and can't wait to see the antics he gets up to. Keep going, it's awesome!
Linoleum white tile, too-bright lights, and shining chrome stations that doled out food to ponies who stepped along in bored-looking lines. Unlike your average high school cafeteria, however, the food didn’t look like a biohazard.
This is the single funniest thing i have ever seen said about school. I laughed so hard at this during my late night reading i almost woke my fiance.
BTW i really respect your writing style. It is crisp and detailed with a touch of class with interesting yet often underused words without using to many of them to drive away the average reader. You really do hold a remarkable ballance here and it shows. Great work!
Having a blast with this so far, keep up the good work!
In what way will the next chapter be weird?
Are we talking kinky weird?
This is looking to be a great read!!!
"Being valuable"... that has a whole lot of interpretations. I'd like to hear if the street sweeping business he worked for wound up falling apart with him gone, because it sounds like he's had a fairly unimportant life up to this point.
Unless it isn't referring to the importance of what he does in and of himself, but as a part of something larger. That isn't much of a talent, though... all lives influence others and change the direction they go, making everyone objectively valuable.
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No. It will be a third person intermission
officially end
Canterlot. For
the resulting
repetition
cozy enough
Hm the repetition here is on purpose?
Hmm she did see him, didn't she?
a repeat performance
What would a boutique have to do with the presence of a food court?
First Prize is a great main character, his shyness is adorable and when he has built his confidence he will be an amazing stallion. Until then Rock Solid is also a good pair for him, he is confident and strong and I love how they have almost a buddy-cop relationship. I do hope you incorporate Raven a bit more into this fic as well, her bitchy exterior obviously is up for fun even without the sex.
This is becoming very good. I am really enjoying this fic!
You friend. First story on the site and it's golden! I love watching First blunder around and can't wait to see the antics he gets up to. Keep going, it's awesome!
This is the single funniest thing i have ever seen said about school. I laughed so hard at this during my late night reading i almost woke my fiance.
BTW i really respect your writing style. It is crisp and detailed with a touch of class with interesting yet often underused words without using to many of them to drive away the average reader. You really do hold a remarkable ballance here and it shows. Great work!
Good, I was actually hoping for good swaths of story between the sex.
I'm guessing that's because she doesn't seem to have... "cleaned up" while sprucing up before heading out.