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Actually, it's #1368362, not 82.
9461887
Good catch! Guess I can't read. đ Thanks for the heads up!
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Welcome.
you ain't old, man on the moon is classic
9462009
I feel old though. đ
Mmm
More Vinyl/Tavi Mind control Pretty please!
I have to say, a clopfic doesn't quite work so well if a sex act ends one paragraph later.
Like, it's pretty much
"the strap-on is ready to enter"
"It enters, and there's thrusting and stuff"
"they are relaxing after having wild sex"
A bit jarring
9463106
Fair enough! I tried to focus on certain things and glossed over other aspects. Looks like I didn't quite hit the mark! (Shoddy Aim) đ¤Ł
I appreciate the feedback, bro.
The mind control set up is done well and written well...but the actual clop segments - except the first one - feel somewhat subpar. If you tackled this again, I think the next one will be better.
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Me:
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Thanks! I wholeheartedly agree.
I was doing some thinking the other day and I think I may have discovered a logical reason to why this came out so...poorly. It's definitely something I need to be cognizant of if I'm to tackle something like this in the future.
You should do more like Spike making absolute commands through sex on his ladies the CMC.
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I'd say the lack of focus on the sex part is actually a bonus. There's a lot of lesbian action, but kinky stuff are rare
Octavia eating vinyl out is my favorite
I am going, to be honest, I loved this. It is probably better than what I would have written/am writing(soon to be uploaded)...
Hey dude, Scarlettblade made a reading of this on YouTube
9465111
Could you elaborate
So God damned turned on
Comment didn't go through first time, retyped short. Reading this felt like reading a partially fleshed out outline. It started well, and felt to become less descriptive towards the end. Downvoted; appreciate the good spelling and grammar. Will see other work.
I say this without a hint of sarcasm or irony:
My favorite part is that Octavia is totally happy with this without Vinyl making her happy with it.
Sheâs just genuinely enjoying whatâs happening free from any âyouâre happy unquestionablyâ BS that wouldâve definitely scared me away (Vinyl just told her not to question it, not to like it). I also like how these two clearly and truly love each other. Even if Vinyl sees Octavia as more of an object, making her do the cleaning and all that (total bitch move on her part), she still does love her as a person, and is capable of truly appreciating the letter the cellist left for her and always keeping her happiness in mind.
What I would love is for her to write âtalk to your marefriend about how you feel about your relationshipâ, and the conversation that ensues results in the pair tying the knot... after tying several knots of rope, hint hint and all that.
Good clop, kinky enough to scratch all my most shameful itches while keeping things tame enough to keep me from regretting my life choices.
Sexy DJ horse mind-fucking the classy tofu cellist gets a good/good from me, will likely be coming back soon!