Sometimes life doesn't work out how you want. Sometimes there's joy, sometimes there's suffering, often times life can be as cruel as it is kind, but you have to take the bad with the good. That's life, and Twilight Sparkle has no choice but to live.
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Yeah, Pinkie and Maud!
Dude, you are bucked...this is Pinkie and Maud your dealing with!
Yay for Maud!
...She did....
Clam down Starlight.... Fearing out is the last thing you need right now.
Your in the middle of a War induced Equestria, that's what.
One that were complete jackasses!
...it's a place that is the very opposite of the magical Equestria everypony knows.
No, no you have not.
Well....Starlight's awake. That's 3/4 of the party accounted for. But the last story's Twilight is still MIA. That...well she can take care of herself, but the others around her....I wonder if she's even in her alicorn guise, or if her default is just the light in the vague shape of a pony.
Well now, I wonder if Star is going to see what else she caused?
Inspired by another fic, I decided to try writing poems. So, here is one about this story (it's kind of fanfanfiction). It's far from perfect, but I hope you'll enjoy it anyway.
It is supposed to be taught from the point of view of one of the inhabitants of this new Equestria and talks about the Avatar of Vengeance (I think that's how it's called).
Alien creature made of light
Its eldritch shriek fills souls with fright
If you ever hear those screams
You'll be slain within it's beams
Hunting ponies on our land
None survived to tell the tale
All we know: its ghoulish wail
All have failed to make a stand
Its ancient origin unknown
Even to the royal throne
In this mystery it stays
Spreading tales about its blaze
The brave army of the light
That the shadows once expelled
Cannot win this endless fight
By the entity excelled
Hoo boy, scary Pinkie is always unpredictable. I wonder how she got to be the way she is in this timeline?
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I can see what you're doing but my problem here is that you did not handle the transition well within the narrative. The previous story was building up a specific premise so readers will be going into the sequel with certain expectations but then you seemingly throw it away to tell a different story. On top of that, you seem to be taking time to re-introduce Bad Future!Twilight who was the protagonist of the previous story. In my eyes, this makes for a bad first impression.
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Perhaps you're right on your first point. While I had always intended to focus on GF Twi from her prospective, BF Twi had a lot more involvement in the beginning. The change stemmed from a combination of not know exactly how to go about my original plans at the time of conception, and a shift in how I wanted GF Twi to undertake her development in the story.
The result will end up being the same as I intended, but the path to get there changed, and unfortunate for those who wanted to immediately reconnect with BF Twi, that will have to wait a bit. That said, I was actually planning to introduce BF Twi in the next chapter, but given the point you're trying to make, that's neither here nor there.
You're disappointed with how the story started, and I can understand why, but at the end of the day, this is a completely different story with a different focus, and that's what I wanted to convey. If how I chose to start the story didn't meet your expectations, all I can say is I'm sorry to hear that, but I thank you for the input all the same. It reminds me that I need to reflect on how I write sequels in the future, not nust as an author, but as a reader who's become invested in the characters of the previous story.
Hm. Starlight didn`t properly reflect on her actions in this universe, so she may be a bit of a prick.