Tortoise Love

Today at the beach was a long day because Tank manage to lead the baby turtles into the ocean unharmed. After that heartwarming moment, Rainbow Dash decided to buy another pet just for Tank, but a female tortoise.

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Frizzy

Frizzy #1 · Nov 9th, 2018 · 1 · ·

The center alignment is painful.

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Discord The Narrator #2 · Nov 9th, 2018 · · ·

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What do you think about the rest of the story?

Frizzy

Frizzy #3 · Nov 9th, 2018 · · ·

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I couldn't get past the first few paragraphs because the formatting is that terrible.

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Discord The Narrator #4 · Nov 9th, 2018 · · ·

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Well, at least you tried.

HexGirl

HexGirl #5 · Nov 11th, 2018 · · ·

A short and simple story but overall nice. I felt like some description or elaboration could have been implemented more throughout the story though. The youthful upbeat feel was kept nicely and you got a couple chuckles out of me. I like how you extended the window shopping instead of making it a one stop shop giving a point of realism. In the end it has all the main points a story should have and kept my attention.

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