A request to help finish some overdue paper work in Canterlot leads Twilight to ask where life is taking the ponies she cares about.
Cadence and Shining Armor go about their lives unaware their family is targeted by an old enemy.
Celestia has been slowly transitioning governmental power and responsibility to Luna since her return. The daily toil takes more and more energy and the strain is beginning to show.
Three very different captains try three different ways to keep their Princesses safe.
Cover art generated by me with Stable Difusion AI
JAvarod offered to proofread so I've asked him to look over the previous chapters.
2/27/19 Prolog Edited
3/12/2019 Part 1 Edited
Chapters (15)
As far first stories go, you get points for not falling into the cesspit a lot of new authors do by doing hated genres on the site.
Just, why not just leave this as a straight up Slice of Life fic with the princesses? Everything up to the scene transition feels like it belongs. After feels like something for an entirely different story.
Upvoted anyway since I do like it.
Oh get over yourself, Twilight. You've led a charmed life, and will keep getting unearned rewards and accolades until the show ends. No one buys that you have any problems - or that the ones you've made up in your head amount to anything.
Nice cliffhanger.
Finnaly got the curage to reply to these comments.
First of all thank you for taking the time to try my story out.
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Thanks for the points, I've always loved adventure and sword and sorcery stories. I'm just wondering which genres you are talking about. I know that some people have a preference but i wasn't aware that some genres are downright hated
I do enjoy a good slice of life, but it i wanted there to be a bit more going on. I'll try to work the adventure angle in better, i really want them to compliment each other and not feel like two differnt stories.
Thanks for the upvote and the comments, glad you enjoy it.
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I'm actually not sure why your comment is getting down voted other then it's tone maybe? I think the hero/god complex that Twilight usually has in adventure arcs needs to be addressed. She's a wonderful character but a bit full of herself at times, much like Harry Potter in his later books. I will disagree that Twi receives things she doesn't deserve, IMO she's a self made mare who has a deeply rooted inferiority complex
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Glad it was well received.
Why the fuck does that photo look like a Hakuna Matata dance lineup? *Lion King sucks balls*
Velly interesting, i'm looking forward to where you're going with this.
I will say you need a lot of proofreading, which icd be happy to do, although I'm a bit backed up right now.
I'm not 100% sure, but I think you misspelled overdo.
There's only one n in shining. Please respond to this comment.
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Thank you for pointing those out. I’ll correct them.
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Bugger, missed a few things.
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when you create a story and make one person the lynchpin where everything falls apart without them claiming a hero/god complex is ridiculous
well now i really want to see Twilight and Celestia as a couple.
Dude this story is so good,that cliffhanger was epic!
I think Captains, Queens, and Princesses is amazing! The world building is spectacular, the character voices feel right, and the stakes keep getting higher. protopony clearly knows the canon and leverages it to generate satisfying details. I made a blog post to bang the drum for this wonderful story. I look forward to protopony resuming postings on Captains, Queens, and Princesses!
That was a good chapter goodluck with the next one.
Someone here is getting played multiple someone's
Even though I saw something like this coming, it still surprised me
That was a good chapter. It was nice to see Shining Armor being a competent fighter and hero against the giant lobsters.
This is the darkest timeline.
I have three questions that I find odd.
I assume we are using the medieval standard of succession if not, which version are we using?
Why did Chrysalis wait to this extent where she had to sacrifice her life to save her daughter? On top of that, why did she not sense twilight's emotion beforehand to knew that her love have been poisoned in some way?
It seems my understanding might be off in terms of the timeline, events, or the order of how things unfolded. Didn't the security system fail? Chrysalis had already infiltrated the castle, made it to the throne room, and it seems the only reason her identity was discovered is because she revealed herself. Additionally, I'm curious about the role of the staff in this situation.
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Glad you appreciated it. The combat is fun to write.
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For the ponies Celestias' reign has been all they've known for 1000 years in many cases her will is absolute, she has done her best to keep the diarchy alive knowing that one day Luna would return. But I don't think she would force Luna to rule if she didn't want too. Ultimatley it would take something drastic to get Celestia off the throne and I wanted Luna to be the catalyst but Twilights growth would eventulay let Celestia give herself permission to abdicate as well. Since they have no living realtives Celestia would have to name an heir, and I think we all belive that that's one of the reasons she was taking on students in the first place. In this story Celestia will definetly be naming Twiling as her heir.
Chrysalis is still evil in this story, she is nowhere near reformed, she still carries the pride and selfishness that she always has, she does love her daughter and she wants her to live, knowing her time is short she opted to wait as long as possible to limit the humiliation that surrendering would bring. She truely belived that Twiligt could and would help her daughter, but she didn't expcet something bad like heart break happening to her. It was a complete suprise for her.
Chrysalis's line is a little more straight forward, the hivelike society of the changelings suggest to me that they are all Chrysalis's children but later episoeds threw a wrench in that idea. I decided that the changlings would be structured a bit differnetly, with drones, infletrators, and soilder variants with Chrysalis at the top, a special organ that she has grants her that ability to sustain the hive and is something that can be passed on. Sucession would be based on that.
To be frank Twiligh is very smart and very clever, she would definitly spend time and energy doing her best to ensure that changelings wouldn't be albe to freely roam the palace. In my mind, as the element of magic, Twilligh would be albe to decern ANY spell she saw cast with her own eyes, her talent and memory leave little doubt of that in my mind. I've no doubt that her wards would be able to see through a changeling disgiuise. But I've also no doubt that the changlings are smart enough to modify thier magic if they need to. Twilights wards would be albe to detect a changling from the season 2 invasion or the season 6 incedent. But they would have altered thier magics after that. The wards only tripped when Prisma transformed in their range, so they didn't necessarly fail, plus it wouldn't have been a secret that Twilight was working on the castle wards.
Chrysalis has been deeply wounded by Shinings shield striking her in season 2, since that time she hasn't had the ability to feed or even taste love, this is why she didn't realise that Twilight had a broken heart, I wanted to make this more clear, I'll see what i can do to revise that.
I love the MLP moive and many of the elements in it. The staff of Staff of Sacanas is one of those things, it's Tireks power built in to a mobile weapon. The Storm king used it to drain Celesta, Luna, Cadance and Twilight at the end of the movie. He uses the power of only Celestia and Luna to play with the sun and then to make the storm at the end. Althought the former three alicors were petrified when their magic was stolen it was clearly painfull and traumatic for twilight to be drained. I wanted that weight to carry with the staff. Twilight would do anyhting to keep Celestia from being hurt again. Shes desperate and alittle angry normally the staff is soemthing she would NEVER use on anyone. The fact that she would even point it at another living pony, to me indicates that she's not entirely in the right here. Once again it appears that i didn't convey that idea. I'll work on it.
Thanks for the questions and thanks for reading the chapter.
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Nice art