Celestia is tired after 1,000 years of doing her job AND her sister's. What could Luna possibly do when her older sister leaves everything to her while she takes a nap? Another one-shot I believe.
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Meeehhh...Just not seeing it
And so trollLuna rises. It was a nice little story but could use something extra I just can't put my hoof on it though.
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Yes I do think that Pinkie Pie is needed to help Luna pull a prank on Celestia. In the name of Equestria I request that this be done.
Edit: Now that I think about it, you could turn this into a royal pranking story
A one shot go at a Celestia trying to sleep...
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5 STARS!
A+
YOU GOT A LIKE SIR.
But no, seriously... what the hell.
WHERES THE INTREST.
(Excuse the dick-like behavior.)
it's.... really not happening here.
This story is exactly what I had expected it to be. A simple story that while well written failed to amuse the crowd and was forced to suffer. I do not read for the sake of amusement, only for the sake of escape from reality and this story did just that so I find no fault in it. I am a bit confused as to how forcing someone to take a nap is a punishment but since this is only the first chapter again I fail to see anything actually wrong with it. Having said that however, if you did choose to end it here then I would have to say that as a complete story it is a little minimalistic in terms of the plot and story development. I would recommend adding in more dialogue as well as increasing the length of the stories so as to make more room for plot development
I look forward to your future plans for this story.
Sincerely;
The Fictional Critic
A soft, pink glow came off of Celestia's horn as...
Celestia's horn glow is yellow... not soft pink...
Just look at Celestia's horn at the start of any episode.
And, I didn't know that giving Luna a sleep would be considered as punishment... Isn't Celestia an Alicorn? And powerful?
Sorry everyone for not replying sooner, but between school and a lot of stuff, everything's been weird. I have plans to continue this story, although I'm not exactly sure when. To all of you, thanks for the comments, good and bad!
And to Lunard, I'm sorry about that, I'm an idiot xD.