I shall Butcher your dreams
Thorax tried to think of how to make Spike Love him, and Starlight offers him some advice, all she has to tell him is "Spike isn't gay" This Tell's Thorax all he need's, the problem isn't him, the problem is that he is a Him, so he set's off to change that and Win Spike's heart.
I am 100% Making this story because I found this picture while surfing the web and found it Adorable in every way.
Warning, this story does have Genderbending.
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Needs a serious proof reading and editing. Sorry to say, but dropped this within a few paragraphs due to the errors.
Definitely has promise, and I like the blunt humor you have with it. The story could use a serious grammar edit, but all the ingredients for the story are here. It's just a matter of refining and adding them in the right order.
yes do it, be the pretty princess you want to be, get dat genetically perfect booty.
Needs editing... still, the writing is pretty good so far.
Fix it. Just please have a proofreading done. It may be good once it's fixed.
Ehhh
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Any of you wanna help with that!? Editor's never help me past 2 chapters
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Same here, it's just too much.
Should have thought about it before you turned into a colourful equinoid locust...
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I'm busy working on another project. Sorry.
I cant wait for more
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It's alright
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I could throw some time at it, I suppose. I'm at a bit of a lull in my own life busywork. Never did it before.
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Definitely needs some rewriting in the layout part for example some paragraphs were cut in the middle of a sentence and some quotation marks were missing
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try re-reading the first chapter, I just finished editing it
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First Chapter has been Seriously Edited, please take a look and tell me if it's better
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Could use a little more work grammatically in the first chapter. Second chapter as well. Cant wait for more!!
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Yay, Decent!
wat?
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didn't mean to publish opps
Why not asking Cadance? I bet she is more than willing to lend some.
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Cadence isn't at the party, and he want's to do it before the end of Heart's and Hooves day
He should totally take Glim Glam's hair.
Why would he not just take some of Starlight's hair? She's hot.
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I'm pretty sure that Celestia also would give him her hair (if her mane have hairs at all) without much problems.
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Much better! I enjoyed reading it in all its cheesiness.
...why not take a strand of DNA from an already female changeling?
The change wouldn’t be too drastic, and all he/she would do is possibly shrink!
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He didn't think to ask
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I guess that Thorax wants to look as good as possible as a "she". If so then he really needs Celestia hair :). IIRC according to WoG she pretty much a pinnacle of pony beauty.
Ok in all if this happens everyone in this story would be godly confused but in the right of it yes an no . Now to play the role of fucked up teenager would ask if this happen can spike have sex with new her . That role over how would this work
Спасибо за работу
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Я не могу читать по-русски
но спасибо
Something missing here?
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thank you
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fixed it
You have my attention.
More soon please.
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I promise to try
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That's all I expect.
Continue soon please
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I'm working on the next chapter, expect it late November - early December
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Yay! Around my birthday!!
(My birthday is December 11th)
This is going to be super funny pls make more
Starlight's frustration was a bit too funny for me. I now want a live reading of this fic.
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that would be awesome
Can't wait for the next chapter
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neither can I, I just can't think of a good way to go about it
Cent wait for the next chapter
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If you want help I don't mind