9324822 I'm honestly getting tired of the MC of all things. His dialogue is interesting at times in small amounts but I was sick off it within the first few chapters.
9326462 I knew people like that, in fact one of my best friends in high school was like that. He still knew when to turn it down or shut up. It's one of the reasons I hate this type of characterization/stereotype. It just as insulting as any other.
9326522 Again, true enough. But the with the amount of chapters in as we are, his character is set in stone. So he likely won't get better. Meaning the only choices are to stick it out, or give up on the story.
9326555 Thank you two for your comments I will work on toning it down in future chapters along with how others react to it. While it is part of his Oz’s character to have poor filter I hope it doesn’t detract to much from the story.
Please tone his moter mouth down. It's just dumb at this point that he can't go two seconds without shooting himself in the ass halfway around the world.
I don't know if I do or don't want him to get his mouth under control.
9324822
I'm honestly getting tired of the MC of all things. His dialogue is interesting at times in small amounts but I was sick off it within the first few chapters.
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It can be a bit much, but there are bound to be people like that in real life, it's just people who can handle them are much more rare.
9326462
I knew people like that, in fact one of my best friends in high school was like that. He still knew when to turn it down or shut up. It's one of the reasons I hate this type of characterization/stereotype. It just as insulting as any other.
9326522
Again, true enough. But the with the amount of chapters in as we are, his character is set in stone. So he likely won't get better. Meaning the only choices are to stick it out, or give up on the story.
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That may be true but having most of every chapter be about characters overreacting to his comments is also a major part of the issue.
"your" needs to be "you"
I would rework this into two sentences.
Plug it in, plug it in... or did you mean Glave?
Waid?
Other than that, good job.
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Thank you two for your comments I will work on toning it down in future chapters along with how others react to it. While it is part of his Oz’s character to have poor filter I hope it doesn’t detract to much from the story.
Please tone his moter mouth down. It's just dumb at this point that he can't go two seconds without shooting himself in the ass halfway around the world.