Rumble and Applebloom aren't happy with their current bodies, and try an enhancement potion to improve them! The results... have unintended consequences...
Applebloom sighed and sank into the plush sofa of Garden Delights outdoor seat. She was enjoying a light brunch with Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle on their off day from school. Tomorrow they’d be on and would all have to in. For now, the trio could kick back and relax. Or at least two of them could.
I think you missed a word.
“It had to be two feet long and thick at the base like a cola can,” Sweetie whispered,” it was even thicker at the base between my legs. So, I start touching it and stroking it and I keep guessing how long is but I kept guessing wrong. And it’s so warm and hard and throbbing between my legs, and he’s dripping stuff into the pool from the tip. Then Terramar asks if I want to feel how big he is.”
Quotation marks on the wrong side. Keep is present tense, kept is past tense, which did you intend to use? Also, I think you missed a word between "long" and "is"
Interesting thing, by the way, is that I actually found this story originally through the pictures you drew for it.
Sweetie Belle looked away sheepishly. “I put on one of Rarity’s bikinis instead of mine. The purple diamond pattern ones that I wore that one time at Diamonds pool party.”
Applebloom froze in her seat. She had a penis in her pants.. That was HER penis.
well shit applebloom done made a big mess she must of been really pent up
I think you missed a word.
Quotation marks on the wrong side.
Keep is present tense, kept is past tense, which did you intend to use? Also, I think you missed a word between "long" and "is"
Interesting thing, by the way, is that I actually found this story originally through the pictures you drew for it.
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I'm glad you found it at all then!
Terramar? Fucking Terramar?!
You gotta be shittin' me...
...Daaaaaaaang, Sweetie...
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What?
I guess they drinked the wrong potion.