Rumble and Applebloom aren't happy with their current bodies, and try an enhancement potion to improve them! The results... have unintended consequences...
It's up to the standards of good for porn in terms of story. As for the writing part, you're doing well, though there's some stuff that could and should be edited. For example,
His once roomy jean shorts groaned as his legs packed on supple layers of fat in his thighs and ass. Now there were no hints of wrinkles except around his crotch as the space inside was greedily sucked up thu his expanding assets. The sensation of massaging his needy pussy brought a silent gasp to his plumping lips. It was so good! His chest heaved and fell, the small breasts encased inside swelling larger with each breast. In minutes his buttoned up shirt was straining against a 34C cup pair of tits, the dark nipples having lengthened another inch and seriously tenting the fabric.
thru breath I think you meant to just use "C" here.
The funny part that i laugh that is good comedy. He was growing breasts that was funny. A stallion change into a mare I guess that is transgender... However that is really good and the story that leads up to it. I hope you keep going on it.
holy howdy this was amazing, i adore me some sluttification and tftg
A little saddened that the entire class didn't pounce on him immediately, but I'm sure there's plenty of time for escalation here. Looking forward to seeing Bloom's side to everything too, keep it up!
9152606 technically it's tg which is supposed to be short for the same thing but TG refers to gender transformation within the transformation community, transgender is usually used to refer to other states of gender being.
It's up to the standards of good for porn in terms of story. As for the writing part, you're doing well, though there's some stuff that could and should be edited. For example,
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I think you meant to just use "C" here.
Why no SEX tag ?
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Whoops! Fixed
The funny part that i laugh that is good comedy. He was growing breasts that was funny. A stallion change into a mare I guess that is transgender... However that is really good and the story that leads up to it. I hope you keep going on it.
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Oh you bet!
well if thats rumbles then appleblooms is gonna be just as intresing
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Ah dammit I missed those...
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just you wait!
holy howdy this was amazing, i adore me some sluttification and tftg
A little saddened that the entire class didn't pounce on him immediately, but I'm sure there's plenty of time for escalation here. Looking forward to seeing Bloom's side to everything too, keep it up!
Talk about being saved by the bell!
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do ruble and applebloom end up together becasue that would be one hell of a story to tell their kids
This is an image of gender-bent Rumble? Who is the artist?
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I drew it for my story.
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I see. So I take it this scene will appear in the story later.
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I sail multiple ships.
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Tho, you're too much focused on Rumbloo.
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No such thing as too much when its a ship you like. And I like it.
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technically it's tg which is supposed to be short for the same thing but TG refers to gender transformation within the transformation community, transgender is usually used to refer to other states of gender being.
more like THOT swap
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DELET THIS
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U CNT MAKE ME
(whistles)...wonder how AB's doing? I can only imagine what her turning into a hyper sexy young colt is gonna be like...
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Are you in for a surprise next chapter then
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She doesn't change at all? Or becomes just as endowed as Rumble?
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