I write/read clopfics. Most pee/omorashi.
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Not my thing, and not going to downvote for that, but seeing "heavy watersports" just makes me wonder if they're going swimming in deuterium oxide.
Don't stop writing!
Very interestingly written I like it
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That's your first thoughts? XD
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Always nice to see someone who dislikes it but won't downvote or judge for it.
As for me, I'm more into the wetting of almost any outfit other than a diaper, rather than the watersports tagged here, but I won't downvote either.
My biggest criticism for this would be the pacing. It's supersonic. Even as a one-shot clopfic, it could still do with a bit more build-up. And even during the acts themselves, there could be a bit more pacing filler so that upon reading it, isn't over just as soon as it has started, moving lightning quick from one scene to the next.
That, and the paragraphs could stand to be broken up a bit more so we aren't facing walls of exposition text. Breaking that up with a bit more dialogue would help, and ease the sense of the characters acting like puppets just being moved along on a rail of action sequences.
As a fetish fic, it's by no means bad. It's like a really good appetizer. Tasty, but it's not very filling, leaving me wanting more.
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Yeah I just kinda write these on my phone when I feel like it lol, I don't put much effort into them. I can write better, I just post lazy stuff here.
It's not my fetish, but I'm not one to kinkshame. It's well written and I love how Pinkie kinda eases Twilight into it by going private at first. That's not only the first step to discovering a kink, but a very considerate act. Upvote from me.
Can you to a chapter 2 of this fic please