In a sleepover, Applejack dared Rainbow Dash to wear super sexy clothes and walk in Canterlot Mall. With her daring nature, Rainbow agrees. In the mall, she attracts the attention of Soarin and Zephyr Breeze, who are instantly in love with her. Soarin even transferred to Canterlot High School to be with Rainbow Dash. In the meantime, Zephyr started doing favors for Rainbow in hopes of being noticed. Who will Rainbow choose?
(Even though the cover art is pony version, this is a Equestria Girls fanfic.)
Chapters (24)
I don't really like the grammar but this fanfiction is just so weird I want to read more.
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Hmm,intruiging...
I think soarin was a bit too...honest.It was not like him at all.Sorry,I know it took so much of your time typing this out...
This was a great chapter.
Hehe,I kinda don't agree with Spitfire having a crush on him and all that.I think it would be more of a 'Lightning Dust' situation.Spitfire is a really tough and firey kind of person and never in a million years I will imagine her do that.I am sooooooooooo sorry for my horrible critisism!!!
A bit short...
This was good.
This is more of a Pinkie thing to do.
This would be more of a Rarity thing.
That's all from me.
It's 'hung their heads in shame.'
And,erm,Principal Celestia is a mild,calm person.It's rare for her to shout.
Oh,god.
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Ever read the SpitfireSoarin love stories??
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Error noted.
Sushi?Maybe a cupcake or a cookie would be more...flavoursome?Savouring?I don't know.
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IDK.
That was so funny.
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My friends suggested that. Thanks.
A bit fast,a bit quick...but I have never had a crush on anybody either so I don't know.
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Actually, me too. I was just guessing what will happen in a relationship.
It's great!I'll definetely be reading more when the next chapter is posted!
I loved the story!
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Thanks! I do my best.
This is good, the whole story is so far. Don't think it's bad, because that isn't what I'm saying at all.
Just, why is Celestia asking him why he's transferring? She shouldn't care. Why is there paperwork for both of the principals to sign? Princess Twilight got in by saying she's new here, and Celestia went with it. Why is the principal setting her students up? That's just weird. Why is Celestia giving Soarin the student files? That is, just, no. Why does Celestia care WHICH student he loves? Stalker, or something, Celestia?
Like I previously said, really good story. I just wanted to say the flaws of this chapter. Keep writing, no matter what.
Yes!!
I admit, though I don't like to directly ship any characters(unless they're already together or Lyrabon), I always want to see RD start to fall for Zephyr, and enjoy seeing Zephyr try. Keep writing.
Who else has a Zephyr in there life trying so hard to impress you but it doesn’t work mine is called a Deandre who try’s so hard for me to like him that he follows around at school
Lol remind me to invite soarin to a poker game sometime, with how honest he is i’d always know where i stood
wtf that was fast
that is so awkward
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I'm sorry but...who is “I”
ummmm, ok?
good so far
that defiantly sounds like RainbowDash*Sighs*, why must she always exept dares
oh now I know! “I” is RainBow Dash
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Applejack
Thanks
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its AJ
hahaha this is how I feel whenever my aunt gives so much food
That's how I feel everytime i crush on a fictional character