(Rated Mature to be safe, but content should be mostly PG/PG-13.) When Starlight pays a visit to her dad, Firelight reveals his intent to treat his daughter like a foal for the week. And Starlight is anything BUT thrilled with the idea.
This story is so good and it's only the second chapter. Gotta say again, can't wait for more.
Also I just wanted to point out something. During the feeding scene, Firelight said the word "aeroplane". I'm not exactly caught up in the mlp series and I haven't watched the show in awhile so I don't know if you meant airplane or if aeroplane is something in mlp. I feel kinda dumb for not knowing but if you did mean airplane, they don't have them in the show (to my limited knowledge). You could use the word "chariot", "pegasi", or "friendship express" in the place of that word but that's just my opinion.
8999573 To be fair, airships refers specifically to zepplins a.k.a blimps. So not quite in the same category. But zepplins predated airplanes only by a couple of years if we're talking about jet technology instead of propeller technology.
This is a super-ultra-awesome story! I feel you've captured Fire Light and Starlight quite well. Starlight's protests along with her father's determination to make up for lost times definitely mix well.
The dialogue between the two is certainly my most enjoyed part of the story. What happens is great but their verbal exchanges, along with Starlight's thoughts, really make this tale a win!
Looking forward to more. Also I am glad you didn't use the inhibitor ring. The way Starlight protested it was not only a good addition to the story but also makes you think such artifacts might be used to help foals who are having trouble with their magic. :)
Hmm I don’t think starlight would be agiainst hoof painting or just crayons. I wonder if he can sneak a raspberry into her tummy. Maybe let her build a pillow fort
So is this about the extent of the description of diaper changes we will get? Also hope starlight will make a messy diaper soon.
8998394 Yes on the description part.
This story is so good and it's only the second chapter. Gotta say again, can't wait for more.
Also I just wanted to point out something. During the feeding scene, Firelight said the word "aeroplane". I'm not exactly caught up in the mlp series and I haven't watched the show in awhile so I don't know if you meant airplane or if aeroplane is something in mlp. I feel kinda dumb for not knowing but if you did mean airplane, they don't have them in the show (to my limited knowledge). You could use the word "chariot", "pegasi", or "friendship express" in the place of that word but that's just my opinion.
8999235 They do have airships.
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Whoops. Well... now I know!
8999573 To be fair, airships refers specifically to zepplins a.k.a blimps. So not quite in the same category. But zepplins predated airplanes only by a couple of years if we're talking about jet technology instead of propeller technology.
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That's true.
I also for some reason forgot about air baloons despite the fact that it's not only showed in the first episode but the intro as well...
8998721 They clearly have indoor plumbing, and "Baby Cakes" indicates that they do poop.
This is a super-ultra-awesome story! I feel you've captured Fire Light and Starlight quite well. Starlight's protests along with her father's determination to make up for lost times definitely mix well.
The dialogue between the two is certainly my most enjoyed part of the story. What happens is great but their verbal exchanges, along with Starlight's thoughts, really make this tale a win!
Looking forward to more. Also I am glad you didn't use the inhibitor ring. The way Starlight protested it was not only a good addition to the story but also makes you think such artifacts might be used to help foals who are having trouble with their magic. :)
You are good at what you do.
Hmm I don’t think starlight would be agiainst hoof painting or just crayons. I wonder if he can sneak a raspberry into her tummy. Maybe let her build a pillow fort
9000903 Great ideas, I might just add them.