Just a dude who plays Warframe excessively on Xbox.
I went to Crunchyroll Expo cosplaying as my favorite character from the anime 'Bleach', and now I'm stuck in the middle of a battle between Twilight and Tirek. Oh, and did I mention I'm in Equestria now? I'm pretty sure I didn't, but that's besides the point. I have a mirror to find, and the human world to return to. Maybe Princess Celestia will help me find the mirror, who knows?
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Oh wow! It’s a “guy goes to _________-Con as (*insert character from geek culture here*) and then winds up in Equestria as that character” story!
I’ve never EVER seen any kind of story like this one in my 6 years of being a member of this website!
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I know it's a common thing, but hey, you do what you want and I'll do what I want.
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Don't like it?
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Who wouldn't enjoy a thinly veiled piece of wish fulfillment centered around an OC with the charisma of a bathroom puddle?
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Meh, I just wanted to do a displaced Coyote Starrk since it's been bouncing around in my head for a while now. No clue where I'll go with this, just wanted to get it out of my head
Oh wow.. people are still doing displaced huh. Alright I'll bite. But Is lilinette gonna be in it?
This is promising to me. I'm writing a Displaced about Soul Eater's Death the Kid
It'd honestly be more interesting if someone wrote a reverse-displaced.
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somepony dresses up as daring do, ends up in america, wham bam, they're in a facility like area 51, end story
I find displacement interesting, there are a lot of good stories. This ones ok could use better transition from one state to another.
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fair enough, though in a lot of the stories I've written I've been pretty bad at transitions. I could definitely use an editor, and maybe someone to read as I write, to point out some glaringly bad parts
not complaining or anything but WOW that was a speed run i mean come on that went from one end of things to the other you went from arriving to triek to EQG in such a short chapter with very little transition of things or so many things you could have added
its a good choice in character and starting point but again take your time there is so much you can do or add
Simple way to do that is put yourself in that situation. What you might feel, what you would go through.
The transition from Earth to Equestria then suddenly in the middle of a fight there wasn't any shock, or emotion what so ever. Even with inplanted knowledge it would have taken skills and abilities a bit to use let alone master.
Guns are easy to use true but what kind of recoil would one that fires a cero have? Ask yourself questions things like that will help.
One seems rushed with the way it got from one world to another, besides what are the odds that the mirror would have worked with a displaced. Especially when the time frame of the Rainbow Rocks is after Tirek attack, so thirty moon isn't up at the time.
Okay if only watched with baby sister, then would assume he would never have clear details on how the show works unless he was deep into it.
Oh um Tirek would have assume the hollow entity is magic first before anything assuming that anyone with magic can see him, plus Starrks power would literally kill anyone(with a sensitivity to spiritual pressure) weaker than him in an certain amount of time. Basically I agree with Finalmagnus and metordragon.
Grammar wise you are decent for the most part, though I guess transitions would help.
this story doesn't deserver that thumbs down it has. good story BTW.
Nice, what a masterpiece! Liked and followed.
Kewl.
This is fun!
Any ideas on when the next update is coming?
.....Continue.
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