This is a short little Silvellus story (Ocellus x Silverstream). I really love these two together and this was kinda just a random idea I had... It involves a headcanon I have about Changelings I suppose. Should be pretty easy to understand though.
Ocellus suddenly begins to hiss randomly at lunch, confusing her greatly. Since it's Spring break, she decides to ask King Thorax is he knows about what's going on.
The background changeling's name I used, "Lemony" is credited to DA user sketchmcreations. I think we should start giving background creatures names too...along with other new background ponies.
The ending of this is probably rushed and crappy, but it's sort of supposed to be left up in the air I guess. I've had writers block lately too, but I think this turned out ok. I really ship these two, haha.
I liked it
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Edit: I really ship them too
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It sounds more like a start, rather than a full story.
This does not seem like a complete story.
We need to see her talk to Sliverstream afterwards.
It just doesn't feel complete without that.
We need another chapter or story to get that feeling.
Is there a sequal in the works?
The ending doesn’t feel “rushed and crappy” so much as just incomplete. I’d doesn’t really feel like an open ended conclusion either, more like the end of a setup or introduction to a longer story. It’s really good for what it is, but it’s still fundamentally incomplete.
Fab!
Felt a little...unfinished. Which is OK if you make a sequel or add chapters!
This story doesn't really go anywhere and it doesn't really describe what's happening so much as tell it. The whole thing feels kind of like an incomplete summary