Story have changed since i first uploaded it, following the comments from some readers.
I was wondering how would ponies respond if their actual world was a part of the world of New Eden. What would their stance be on the political side? What would be their position on this world's fight for power and survival, in space, and how were they raised there in the first place? I mean, we all know about the stories of the Gallente, Caldari, Minnmattar, Amarr and even the mysterious Jove, but how about the Ponies? What's their own story? Here's my take at trying to make that story happen, in the universe of Eve Online.
PS: First fanfic, expect errors. I would appreciate comments, please. Also, Eve Online is copyright of CCP... not that i'm making money off of this anyway. Speaking of which, if you already know about Eve Online, you can just skip the prologue.
Sounds really interesting and I am gonna read it the moment I can
'nt is actually n't and i is I
has potential but needs more work
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Alright! I can't wait to hear what you thought about it!
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Yeah, i know i have lots of problem with those. You see, its because in my native language, french, "I"s aren't uppercase. I'll pay more attention in future chapters and edits. Also, when you say more work is needed, do you mean story? description? dialogue? 'would help me to know my weaknesses. Thanks a lot for taking the time to comment, by the way!
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The story's to "relaxed" even in a world of friendship like MLP meeting an alien is going to be scary - especially one that just fell out of the sky. Also if you've been conditioned your entire life to believe someone was a sun godess your not just going to accept some random person saying its wrong - especially an alien. The idea is unique and like I said needs some work on the realism a little but this has a-lot of potential.
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Yeah, i know "n't"s and "I"s, as usual. Everypony tells me, someday it will have to be recorded in my head, haha.
About the titan, i had no idea of that event, maybe you could send me a link to it plz?. What i did see, is the Caldari titan near Caldari Prime, in Gallente space and i never saw anything about causing problems on the planet itself, story-wise (except ofc, the gallente population revolting against the invasion, but that's another story).
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(Hehe, drones and blasters for the win!
Not to mention, in game, I'm pretty sure many null security corporations actually do have titans near planets and i wanted to make my story feel like in game.
Anyway, thx a lot for the fav and like! It's really appreciated!
PS: About Luna, you do see the tag under the chapters saying "Incomplete", right? Would'nt be fun if i threw everything i'm planning in the first chapters. Neither for me nor for you lol, as it would make a pretty bad story.
well its about time somepony made an EVE crossover!
I was half way through fixing that issue when I logged on and noticed this.
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Yeah I see what you mean. I had the same feeling that i should have expended more on those ideas. I wanted to make the characters more scared, but i did'nt know how to communicate it to the readers then i went for a more "tensed but relaxed" approach. I do agree that my story needs to be darker. I smell some chapter 2 edits.
By the way, for Twilight's case, she's conflicted inside her own mind. During the scene where my OC speak of what he saw and then discuss, she found a way out of that conflict by rellying on the believes that Celestia still wants the safety of her subject, I do see what you mean aguain though. If i found i've been lied to all my life, i would be pretty angry, sad and only then i would be able to accept it.
Of course, being the magic passionate she is, i had to make her wants to know more about the very source of its power.
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Hehe, agreed.
I think i only saw one, or maybe two others, but weren't the style i was looking for. So i made my own.
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hey Hawk, just noticed your comment, race for 2nd place?
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Oh my god, so much pressure!
I'll do my best!
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as do I
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Who needs drafts when you can edit the same text over and over again?
Seriously though, i had to post my story anyway to know what readers thought about it.
I am a EVE online player and a combat Pilot for Space Monkeys Alliance under the CFC. I am pretty excited to see this actually come up and will give it a read through, so for now a Brohoof for you /) from a fellow EVE online player who's out fighting the war against NC. in Tribute (P.S: I don't expect other bronies and some EVE players to know what i'm talking about here.)
1136343 To be honest, i wouldn't mind reviews before the edit. So that i know which parts needs improvement, while editing.