Page generated in 0.026 seconds
Total duration
640 users online
1,029,441 hits today, 2,924,228 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
the mighty blade forged from the deepest fires of hell
sometimes people (and words) need more space
i can't think up a smart comment for this one
E's that intentional?
im sorry, can you be more specific
im just guessing here, but did you mean to say "mask"?
8792480
Well you see i am writting this on a ps4 with a controller so this is a bit harder for me to do.
8792480
But thank you for showing me my error's
He Really Hit The Money With That One!I
Lol no regrets
Well, this takes a different turn than the others before it. The merchant actually didn’t give him OP powers (Unlike a previous story that was inspired by this.) for so little, his family wasn’t abusive AF, he worked at a great job...This is looking better than the original source material right off the bat. I’ll hope the next 5 chapters are the same quality as this one.
Well there goes my money down the drain
real heavy in the beginning some words miss spelled like (which) u have it as wich and something and somethink but alround really good and funny at the end with the merchant then being hit in the head with 4.3 million bucks rofl
My old friend
Nice start so far, good backstory for the main character, spelling is (was if it's been updated) a bit of an issue, but is understandable since your using a console and remote, good way to make the character op later on in and have a great story. All around just from reading this chapter only so far? It's all good and can't wait to read more*clicks next chapter button*
Did anyone else singed hello darkness my old friend t the end?
8864439
Congratulations! You have found one of 1049 reference I made so far. 1048 to go pal.
Ilove it so far but damm he had a sad life.
That is when she became Batwoman! Hahahahahah! JK.
8890903
This the second time someone commented about that part of the Chapter....... And It's still funny
8839393
yes it just happened
8890913
... no offense dude but you could really use an editor for this. of course I'm willing to help ya out just let me know.
This is the edited version? I'd hate to see what it looked like before. DerpySoupCan, you need to step up your editing. I got a fucking headache.
She is batman.
Firstly, there is more to being an alicorn than sticking a horn to a pegasus. Immortality for one thing, and whatever destiny bullshit they have going on for them that decides what their cutiemarks end up. So his first condition should've just been 'make me an immortal alicorn' and the second should've been something that would make him able to pass both beyond and back to the mortal realm at his own convenience.
Second, I get the money was meant as a pretext backstory for his powers, and I'm alright with it. I'm just wondering, what do you think is this 'merchant society' would do with all that money? Make an underground displacer-item trafficking ring? Buy the entire Illuminati? Cocaine?
Just imagine eldritch entities hiped up on cocaine.
pink wings and pink horn?
memesbams.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/10/futurama-fry-meme.jpg
i look fancy with that!
2nd re-reading btw!
9116302
I am happy that my Story is worth re-reading. Btw, future Chapters will be edited (5-15 I think), so even new readers will be able to read this Story without being too scared by the horrific grammar.
Time to bulldoz through some bad grammar.
9294638
Ehm... Come again? I mean, I know the Grammar in the first few Chapters is very bad, but it will get better. Or are you implying that I should rework the chapter?
9294741
He closed the suitcase and lifted it in the air before slammed it on my head' Ohh... So that’s how it feels to be beaten unconscious with 4,3 Million Dollars and hello darkness-
(You missed a tad at the end. But to finish the last sentence.) -my old friend
.... It's spelled "Prologue"
With such a fucked background he is either gonna be a golden heart hero or a heartless psychopath. I hope is the ladder
I'm Batman
What’s next here last name is Wayne
9473921
Mahahahahhaahahahaahahahahahahahahahahaha I hope so too
Okeeeeey?..... No me convence del todo, pero le daré una oportunidad.