Princess Celestia sends Twilight Sparkle and her friends to investiage dragon activity in the Smokey Mountains. There, they discover a human named Allen, who's ended up on their world by accident and needs their help to find a way home.
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Aw that was sweet at the end
More of the mystery has been revealed. I'm glad the rod didn't work. I was expecting him to bing it back to Ponyville or the outskirts of Ponyville first TBQH. Mostly in the hopes that the rod would remember the location it was activated from making it easier for Allen to get back to Equestria if he could. Thanks for the update. I'm looking forward to the next one.
Are you going to finish the story
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we will have been hanging for a year in 3 days.
I'd love to see this story continue. It's amazing. 馃槉
Update?
Hay partes de esta historia que destrozan mi suspensi贸n de la incredulidad, la parte del hospital, la creaci贸n de un dispositivo que crea portales portales dimensionales al estilo de la zona fantasma de Superman, por ni帽os superdotados
Todo es descrito de tal forma que me recuerda a las viejas pel铆culas de Hollywood, o dicho con otras palabras
El autor no atendi贸 en clases las materia de Biolog铆a y f铆sica, y la electr贸nica es un sue帽o en la distancia, ahora hace fanfic con las frases mas clich茅s posibles que encontr贸 de la ciencia ficci贸n, es como que quiere hacer interesante la historia con el inicio, pero el desarrollo de los conceptos que utiliza asesina la inteligencia del lector, y si hasta yo que no se nada de estas materias puedo ver el asesinato masivo intelectual que est谩 cometiendo, dice mucho del autor
There are parts of this story that shatter my suspension of disbelief, the hospital part, the creation of a device that creates dimensional portals in the style of Superman's Phantom Zone, by gifted children
Everything is described in such a way that it reminds me of old Hollywood movies, or in other words
The author did not attend Biology and Physics in classes, and electronics is a dream in the distance, now he makes fanfic with the most clich茅d phrases possible that he found in science fiction, it's like he wants to make the story interesting with the beginning , but the development of the concepts that he uses murders the intelligence of the reader, and if even I who know nothing about these matters can see the massive intellectual murder that he is committing, it says a lot about the author,
I dare to say that the story loses the interest of the readers and gains points against every time it talks about something scientific
it should be the opposite because in general scientific terms bring reality and hardness to the fictional universes created by the authors, here they are used as clich茅s that must be inserted, which make readers believe that someone missed classes
in all honesty i liked this fic, the mc here, allen, is the most non chalant person ive ever seen, there were so many scenes which i thought would go the same cliche'd drama path but instead mc decided to take it easy from the start, like the scene with luna and her saying humans existed in equestria before him. a (based on fimfiction standards) normal mc would freak out or atleast be more curious about it, but him being him just sipping tea munching on biscuits. i wish if this story were to continue he would play more towards the carefree and calm character he is.