This is a rewrite of my failed story "one of a kind" which was about the last living human. This will also be about the last living human but it will be better.
Still needs work. Not enough emotion or reaction coming from Jackson as I would like to see.
The last bit with Twilight was pretty random. I recommend saving that part for another chapter and flesh out all the details here first. Y'know, to make sense of it all.
Lastly, that was a looooong detail of what happened to earth, and it looked more toward the USA whenever you say 'we'. I got confused because I thought you were talking about the whole human race, not a nation. Also, if you're going to make it that long, make it a prologue introduction chapter, just for the people who wants to read that or benefit the ones who want to get to the story. I know you want to show everyone, but it could get quite boring if it's just facts/intel for a good bit of it.
That's my bit. Hope that helps you out in the future.
Still needs work. Not enough emotion or reaction coming from Jackson as I would like to see.
The last bit with Twilight was pretty random. I recommend saving that part for another chapter and flesh out all the details here first. Y'know, to make sense of it all.
Lastly, that was a looooong detail of what happened to earth, and it looked more toward the USA whenever you say 'we'. I got confused because I thought you were talking about the whole human race, not a nation. Also, if you're going to make it that long, make it a prologue introduction chapter, just for the people who wants to read that or benefit the ones who want to get to the story. I know you want to show everyone, but it could get quite boring if it's just facts/intel for a good bit of it.
That's my bit. Hope that helps you out in the future.
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Thanks I'll fix it
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