A short little RainScratch fic. lots of fluff, but rated teen for mild sexual implications. The art used belongs to the deviantartist, Tecnojock. So be sure to check out their stuff.
Art source: https://tecknojock.deviantart.com/art/Rainbow-Dash-X-Vinyl-Scratch-363180374
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Thanks for the feedback, I'm probably the only one that thinks this would make a cute ship XD.
This was pretty cute! I liked the cuddling parts, because who doesn’t like cuddling? I don’t see too much of this ship and I’m really glad to see something like this out there. You got a good blend of cute and seriousness and it mixes really well with the character dyinamics. Overall, a good job mate.
There were a couple things that nagged at me as an editor, however.
For one, I hardly saw any punctuation after speaking parts. It made it a tad harder to figure out expression.
And another harder to notice thing. When you use the point of view of a character, try to avoid using the point of view of another in the same paragraph. It makes it harder to know what’s happening to who and who is doing what.
Other than that and a few mistypes, this was well rounded and I can’t wait to see more from you.
-Yogi
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Thanks for the review and yup fluff was the main goal of this fic. I'm glad you liked my portrayal of how I think a potential relationship between them might work.
"For one, I hardly saw any punctuation after speaking parts. It made it a tad harder to figure out expression."
I can't really see what you mean by lacking punctuation, I'd appreciate a lot if you could clarify on that
"And another harder to notice thing. When you use the point of view of a character, try to avoid using the point of view of another in the same paragraph. It makes it harder to know what’s happening to who and who is doing what."
A bit of old habit of mine i've been trying to break, heh. Seems it bled a bit into this fic. I don't really have an editor or anything so little thing like that tend to go over my head. I appreciate the review very much, thanks
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missing a comma after, “Ugh, you said it”
“[...] getting to be with you“ missing a period.
missing comma after “bit”.
Hope that clears it up a tad. Sorry for the confusion
Don't worry. We ship them from time to time as well