She tugged at her collar and did a little spin, causing her skirt to flip up a bit and fan around her. Your eyes caught the brief sight of her panties... or was she not wearing any? It was hard to tell, then again why were you trying to get a look anyway?
Oh? are we going to have some brother and sister fun times?
Amazing chapter, buddy. Poor Ailly though all he wanted was to make her fillyfriend happy and enjoy Metallicorn (I like this name better) C'mon, Delta, we all know you like this band too. Take the boy there for some fun and enjoy yourself too
I also loved how Apogee cares for her brother. I'm telling ya, something heartwarming will happen between them.
Glad to see the update came as planned Also glad to know you’re better, Dust
Really enjoyable read, great update
Poor Ally, he’s between the hammer and the anvil, I wonder what he’ll choose? Will he stay at home, respecting his father’s request, and possibly engage in smut, or will he sneak out to the concert, and possibly engage in smut? The possibilities are endless!
Take all the time you need for the next update, we loyal readers aren’t going anywhere. I’ll gladly wait in the name of quality.
The first chapter was interesting but this one felt more like filler. Too much, actually. And the main character is a lot of angst and spineless. I hope DV calls him out for being such a pussy.
Heh, morning wood. Bumping into Delta with it, though? Awkward. Silver lining - it had calmed down on its own thanks to that!
Ah, the classical guy freeze up when a girl asks him something... and then her overreacting by running away before he can explain. That was quite a shitty day.
Seems like Ailly also has quite a bit of repressed anger that's just waiting to blow - I predict that when it happens, the choler will be aimed at Delta. Now that will be a shouting match for the ages! I might be wrong, but if I'm not then I'm absolutely looking forward to that
Oh? are we going to have some brother and sister fun times?
I shall neither confirm or deny this... :rainbowkiss Yep, that was all he wanted to do, poor Ailly indeed. Maybe if Delta pulls herself together, they'll go off and enjoy the concert together
And oooh, maybe! I'm hoping to show some cute stuff between the two of them, hehe.
I will!
8704808 Yep! Didn't wanna let you guys down, and happy to be better dude. And I'm glad it was enjoyable!
The possibilities are endless indeed! I guess we'll have to wait and see which our dear friend chooses. Huehuehuehue.
Glad to hear dude, hopefully I'll have the update out soon
8704811 Yep, I know what you mean dude, hehe. Most tend to rush right into it, I'm more into pacing and such... save for rare occasions, of course.
8705334 Mmm... I suppose I can see how it came off that way. I just don't wanna rush into the cloppy parts. I'm sure we'll see some character growth for Ailly soon, he won't be like this for long I'm sure~
8705819 Oh yes, very awkward! Haha, hopefully it won't happen again... And very~
And shitty day indeed, hopefully he'll be able to explain things to her soon enough.
Hahaha, who knows? We'll certainly see! It certainly sounds interesting, and Ailly might have lots of repressed anger, hehe... we've all been that way at his age once.
Good chapter. I hope that his friends will be used more than none. They seem pretty interesting.
Finally, the only other stallion friend you had, Silver Wit. One of the smooth talkers of your little group, practically oozing with swagger and confidence.
You and Sharp became best friends after that, and besides that, he was actually a really nice guy and was nice enough to get your back.
So goddamn suave, he'll switch his name on you and convince you he didn't.
Great, i cant wait to read more of the story! i dont think ive read the comic or anything i'll have to try and find it myself later. I also like the 2nd person its a nice touch.
I'll be honest I read this originally cause potential twincest, mother son incest plus shino's awesome OC's was going to be hella good. But then you hit me with massively well done characters and a 2nd person view I actually feel connected with and just made me go from "ooooh good erotica" to "Holy shit good fucking story."
8721191 There's a link to the tumblr blog where the comic is in the description of the story.
8722630 8748125 8748381 Hehehe, glad you all liked it so far! I'm doing my best to make this story the best I can, want to be careful and such with these characters.
8758324 8770063 The reasoning for this story not getting fast updates is because I'm wanting to be careful with this one. I'm taking my time, doing my best to find typos, spelling errors, and this is my first 2nd Person story. So I'm not exactly well versed in how these types of stories work, I'm being cautious and shit.
Thanks all for reading, I'm doing my best to get another update ready, just been hitting blocks recently, you know how that goes. Stay tuned friends.
I am now eagerly awaiting to see how Ailly is gonna continue to shit talk Delta. I can already see how this will end up. I really hope I'm right! #angrysex Poor Ailly is getting the short end of the stick here. Then again he has hit hot mom and adorkable little sister. Maybe losing Rose won't be so bad.
You uh... you sure you're reading my stories and not someone else's?
8797089 Hehehe, yeah, things are eventually gonna heat up for our trio of protags here, and it'll certainly be interesting to see how it'll go.
8801105 Why thank you! I was a bit nervous at first, but everyone seems to like Ailly, so woohoo~ Also next update, not sure when that'll be to be honest, been taking a hiatus recently, but I'll get back to this asap.
8801800 Wow! Really? I didn't expect to see this kind of comment pop up, huh... a fanfic reading eh? Well, that's got me hyped! I look forward to seeing it, hehe.
Thanks everyone for reading, I apologize for the slow udpates, but like I stated in my blog recently, I'm taking a hiatus... been feeling kind of eh as of late, but I haven't abandoned anything, don't you worry none.
8862530 Eventually, I've been taking a bit of a break from it for a bit while I recharge. I've got a chapter I'm working on, but it's not my main focus.
I finally, finally got around to reading this after real life decided to stop me a million times, and now I regret not reading it as soon as it came out.
I love the characterization so far, and the pacing is going great. Your take on Delta kind of makes me regret using her in an under this-amount-of-words challenge, so I didn't really have time to build up the character. Well, in any case, your characterization has been perfect in my opinion. I can hardly wait to read Chapter 3.
8900490 Thanks for reading man, I've been wondering where you were at but I'm glad to hear you're doing alright!
I'm glad I did decent characterization, I was a bit worried about how she'd come across when I first posted the story but everyone seems to love it so far! So I'm glad you and everyone else love it! And honestly, from what I read of your stuff about her, you did a pretty damn good job dude, I loved how you wrote her out
Same here, I'm working on it as we speak and I just hit 5k with it. Thanks again!
To let people know, the next chapter is underway, life's hard right now and I'm gonna be busy with moving, conventions and job hunting, but I'll do my damndest to keep updating. Plus, the chapter is very close to being finished, close to a whopping 10k words almost.
It's been updated a bit more now, I've gotten around 10k words, I'm sorry it's taking so long but... well, stuff gets in the way, sadly. it'll continue, I promise that, I don't promise speed.
Slowly, your fillyfriend let her arms drop down to your chest, “...Don’t you care about me enough to at least try?” She asked, “Am I not worth the risk?”
Yeah, red flag there. That sounds like manipulation.
I said it before, I'm gonna say it again. That was a truly lovely chapter, and I can't wait for the next ones. Excellent work, Dust!
Oh? are we going to have some brother and sister fun times?
Amazing chapter, buddy. Poor Ailly though all he wanted was to make her fillyfriend happy and enjoy Metallicorn (I like this name better) C'mon, Delta, we all know you like this band too. Take the boy there for some fun and enjoy yourself too
I also loved how Apogee cares for her brother. I'm telling ya, something heartwarming will happen between them.
Keep it up, Dust!
Glad to see the update came as planned Also glad to know you’re better, Dust
Really enjoyable read, great update
Poor Ally, he’s between the hammer and the anvil, I wonder what he’ll choose? Will he stay at home, respecting his father’s request, and possibly engage in smut, or will he sneak out to the concert, and possibly engage in smut? The possibilities are endless!
Take all the time you need for the next update, we loyal readers aren’t going anywhere. I’ll gladly wait in the name of quality.
I like that the story actually has a sense of pacing instead of just jumping into lolsex. Quality often suffers when authors try to rush.
Keep up the good work. :)
fuck you
The first chapter was interesting but this one felt more like filler. Too much, actually. And the main character is a lot of angst and spineless. I hope DV calls him out for being such a pussy.
Heh, morning wood. Bumping into Delta with it, though? Awkward.
Silver lining - it had calmed down on its own thanks to that!
Ah, the classical guy freeze up when a girl asks him something... and then her overreacting by running away before he can explain.
That was quite a shitty day.
Seems like Ailly also has quite a bit of repressed anger that's just waiting to blow - I predict that when it happens, the choler will be aimed at Delta.
Now that will be a shouting match for the ages!
I might be wrong, but if I'm not then I'm absolutely looking forward to that
Very good chapter!
8704288
Thanks man, happy to have you and Damien on board this train
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I shall neither confirm or deny this...
:rainbowkiss
Yep, that was all he wanted to do, poor Ailly indeed. Maybe if Delta pulls herself together, they'll go off and enjoy the concert together
And oooh, maybe! I'm hoping to show some cute stuff between the two of them, hehe.
I will!
8704808
Yep! Didn't wanna let you guys down, and happy to be better dude.
And I'm glad it was enjoyable!
The possibilities are endless indeed! I guess we'll have to wait and see which our dear friend chooses. Huehuehuehue.
Glad to hear dude, hopefully I'll have the update out soon
8704811
Yep, I know what you mean dude, hehe. Most tend to rush right into it, I'm more into pacing and such... save for rare occasions, of course.
And thanks!
8704907
Love you too
8705334
Mmm... I suppose I can see how it came off that way. I just don't wanna rush into the cloppy parts. I'm sure we'll see some character growth for Ailly soon, he won't be like this for long I'm sure~
8705819
Oh yes, very awkward! Haha, hopefully it won't happen again...
And very~
And shitty day indeed, hopefully he'll be able to explain things to her soon enough.
Hahaha, who knows? We'll certainly see! It certainly sounds interesting, and Ailly might have lots of repressed anger, hehe... we've all been that way at his age once.
Thanks!
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Thanks dude!
Thanks everyone for reading! Love you all.
Good chapter. I hope that his friends will be used more than none. They seem pretty interesting.
So goddamn suave, he'll switch his name on you and convince you he didn't.
Great, i cant wait to read more of the story! i dont think ive read the comic or anything i'll have to try and find it myself later. I also like the 2nd person its a nice touch.
I'll be honest I read this originally cause potential twincest, mother son incest plus shino's awesome OC's was going to be hella good. But then you hit me with massively well done characters and a 2nd person view I actually feel connected with and just made me go from "ooooh good erotica" to "Holy shit good fucking story."
Big props my man, looking forward to more!
8722630
ikr, i still hope for the incest tho, there have been quite some... teasers
8748125
Same bro xD
Rip nearly one month since last update.
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Hehe, that's a possibility
8721191
There's a link to the tumblr blog where the comic is in the description of the story.
8722630
8748125
8748381
Hehehe, glad you all liked it so far! I'm doing my best to make this story the best I can, want to be careful and such with these characters.
8758324
8770063
The reasoning for this story not getting fast updates is because I'm wanting to be careful with this one. I'm taking my time, doing my best to find typos, spelling errors, and this is my first 2nd Person story. So I'm not exactly well versed in how these types of stories work, I'm being cautious and shit.
Thanks all for reading, I'm doing my best to get another update ready, just been hitting blocks recently, you know how that goes. Stay tuned friends.
8771067
Quality over Quantity. I like that!
like some YouTubers i know, make a Video per month but each of them is close to being a Masterpiece.
When next chapter 😤😤😤I need your good ass literature
I am now eagerly awaiting to see how Ailly is gonna continue to shit talk Delta. I can already see how this will end up. I really hope I'm right! #angrysex Poor Ailly is getting the short end of the stick here. Then again he has hit hot mom and adorkable little sister. Maybe losing Rose won't be so bad.
Love the idea of Apogee having a twin, and really liking this set up so far. I await your updates, whenever that may be.
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Pfft, hehe, yeah, something like that
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>Good ass literature
You uh... you sure you're reading my stories and not someone else's?
8797089
Hehehe, yeah, things are eventually gonna heat up for our trio of protags here, and it'll certainly be interesting to see how it'll go.
8801105
Why thank you! I was a bit nervous at first, but everyone seems to like Ailly, so woohoo~ Also next update, not sure when that'll be to be honest, been taking a hiatus recently, but I'll get back to this asap.
8801800
Wow! Really? I didn't expect to see this kind of comment pop up, huh... a fanfic reading eh? Well, that's got me hyped! I look forward to seeing it, hehe.
Thanks everyone for reading, I apologize for the slow udpates, but like I stated in my blog recently, I'm taking a hiatus... been feeling kind of eh as of late, but I haven't abandoned anything, don't you worry none.
8804693
Doubt your writing one more time and I will be forced to consume your ass, whole
Will there be another chapter anytime soon?
8804730
11/10 best response.
8862530
Eventually, I've been taking a bit of a break from it for a bit while I recharge. I've got a chapter I'm working on, but it's not my main focus.
8863760
Only for the best papi UwU
It's good to re-read this again Dust. I can't wait for upcoming chapter.
I wonder are you going to change the cover since there's a pic of Aileron now.
8888358
Same man, I hope peeps will like it!
And maybe, it's a possibility
still waiting on that next chapter bro
8892969
Don't worry! I'm actually working on it right now, got almost 4k words, so everyone be prepared!
8893001
To quote Homer
Woo-Hoo!
I finally, finally got around to reading this after real life decided to stop me a million times, and now I regret not reading it as soon as it came out.
I love the characterization so far, and the pacing is going great. Your take on Delta kind of makes me regret using her in an under this-amount-of-words challenge, so I didn't really have time to build up the character. Well, in any case, your characterization has been perfect in my opinion. I can hardly wait to read Chapter 3.
Rosey sounds like an abusive relationship if she's trying to guilt trip him...
When next chapter papi UwU
8900490
Thanks for reading man, I've been wondering where you were at but I'm glad to hear you're doing alright!
I'm glad I did decent characterization, I was a bit worried about how she'd come across when I first posted the story but everyone seems to love it so far! So I'm glad you and everyone else love it! And honestly, from what I read of your stuff about her, you did a pretty damn good job dude, I loved how you wrote her out
Same here, I'm working on it as we speak and I just hit 5k with it.
Thanks again!
8900996
Indeed she does, perhaps we'll see more about her in the next chapter.
8901030
Soon bbyckes, be patient, I know you can do it
Update?
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Soon
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* For a given value of 'soon'.
I really wish this story wasn't dead. Happens way too often when a story that looks promising dies after anything happens.
9004913
Oof, dat smarts.
9032520
Refer to this
Same for others who pass by
To let people know, the next chapter is underway, life's hard right now and I'm gonna be busy with moving, conventions and job hunting, but I'll do my damndest to keep updating. Plus, the chapter is very close to being finished, close to a whopping 10k words almost.
So uh... there ya go I suppose?
Dear God.............I love It!
(See wat I did there :P)
I'm losing more hope for the story to continue
I hope that continue is very good
9133443
this
It's been updated a bit more now, I've gotten around 10k words, I'm sorry it's taking so long but... well, stuff gets in the way, sadly.
it'll continue, I promise that, I don't promise speed.
SOON(TM)
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Anticipation is killing me!
I know it's going to be worth the wait.
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I'm not gonna keep my hopes too high, just in case
Hoping. Praying. Dreaming. All we can do. But all good things come to those who wait. Well most of the time anyways.
Yeah, red flag there. That sounds like manipulation.
Huh, so Aileron do have his appearance like mane and coat color designed