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OK, I must ask – was this supposed to be a trollfic?
This fic seems like a trollfic so....
I have to downvote because no... just no
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Actually, this was NOT a trollfic.
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Still... can't help but downvote...
Sorry
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In that case… Sorry but this was bad, REALLY bad… and I mean that both from technical and practical POV…
Everyone but Fluttershy seems to be holding the idiot ball, for example:
Twilight – first, when she had distracted Fluttershy - she didn’t try to grab the knife for 30 minutes waiting for… I don’t know what AND Then when she finally managed to stab Fluttershy, she just went to the door... leaving the knife inside her...
Celestia acting like an idiot – she forgot she had royal guards?
And last but not least - Applejack and Spike waiting for HOURS, knowing that Rainbow is probably getting murdered… Instead of… oh, I don’t know – letting the rest of Ponyville know and trying to rescue her?
Everyone seems to be acting OOC – YES, I know it is alt universe but still…
Most paragraphs read like a perfect flow, telling us step by step what the character is doing, for example:
You could write the above like this:
And let’s not forget this gem:
This reminds me of the conversation from Ed’s Wood “Plan 9”:
Lieutenant John Harper: Kelton, Get down there and check it out?
Patrolman Kelton: Well, how do I do that sir?
Lieutenant John Harper: By going down there and checking it out!
Sorry, but nope…
i never seen you get so many dislikes to likes, i'm not a fan of anthro though but it was still good for what it was
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It wasn't the anthro that hurt me here, I think it was the content of the story that hit me here. I had a feeling it wouldn't go over well but I never expected it to do this bad. Well I look at it as a learning lesson, things like that aren't all that popular.
8656908 it's mostly the rape and the ooc, people will downvote that without even reading the story sometimes