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bluedraco2000


A autistic teenager who's dream is to make the world smile and laugh.

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This is the story of a young man Named Kyle Sanders who has been bullied by others ever since he was in preschool. While he wasn't bullied at school he would be abused by his narcissistic mother who would always treat him like dirt and would never give a damn about him. By the time he turned 14 his loving aunt got him away from his abusive mother and took him in as her own son and would promise to love would cherish him forever like a real mother should.when he turned 16 he enrolled in Canterlot High school ready to begin his new life. What he didn't realize that his life is about to get a whole lot more crazier and he will also realize that he is meant for something far greater then he had ever imagined which is Love and THE MAGIC OF FRIENDSHIP

The credit of the cover art goes to  deltaraen



Hello everypony as you all know this will be my first story I have ever written in my life. I would also like to point out the I have Asperger Syndrome and that I have been bullied by many saying that I will never succeed. But I want to prove them wrong so this story will be based on the Equestria Girls time starting from the first movie. The OC name is Kyle Sanders a 16 year old boy in Canterlot High school which the equestria girls age will also be. Kyle will also have Asperger's he will also have several talents like Dancing (which in this story he will have made up his own dancing style)Martial arts and singing. He will also have the ability to adapt to other talents but he will have trouble socializing with others. But thanks to members of his family he will overcome it before he meets Twilight and the other Equestria Girls.

Also to the people who are in charge of deciding if this story gets published I hope it will get published but if it doesn't please tell me anything that I can fix in order for it to get published. Thank you.

Rated M for sexual content( the rest of it is clean)

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 51 )

wow this is the first time im really liking someones first story!!

keep going man i love this!!

btw im not on all the time, (because of mah job) but if ya want help or just to talk im here!

Comment posted by bluedraco2000 deleted Dec 12th, 2017

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Thank you for liking this story LunaFan183 I really appreciate it.

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Also check out my first blog post since I am not sure how post my bio

Comment posted by DAMN HAMSTER deleted Dec 12th, 2017

Okay, I'll admit, engaging concept.

However, I think you could have shown the mother's terrible acts a little bit more. I think having such a background can lead to internal conflicts when people starting caring about it, but there needs to be more of a clear description of how everything has affected him and what particular events hurt the most.

A better build up could've included two specific events where his mother acted against him instead of a general one.

Not hating on your story, I'm just giving feedback! I think the story has a lot of potential! Stories almost always get better later on! :twilightsmile:

Also, if you would like a proofreader, I'd be happy to fix some of your grammatical errors!

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Thank you I really appreciate the feedback I will mention more of the mothers terrible deeds in future chapters.

I like it. Kyle is relatable, and no matter how this story goes, he's going to be better than any male character already in EQG. Some of the dialogue could use a little work and some of the detail s are unnecessary, (like mentioning that Victoria's Secret is the sexiest lingerie- that bit slows down the paragraph.) Otherwise, I can't wait to read more!

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I can but right no I haft to finish my classes online then I can write the second chapter.

Love it! Can’t wait for the next chapter!

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Yeah he is kind of an asshole. I don't like him either. I would have done the same that Kyle did honestly.

Wow! I'm liking this story! Keep it up, dude!

Do you have an idea for when you will post the next chapter?

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I now you all are wanting to see the next chapter but a family emergency came up and my grandmother just got out of the hospital and I was also going through a writers block for quite awhile. But now I am in the middle of writing the new chapter and I am sorry for the wait but I will try to finish it as soon as possible.

That hug at the end was adorable! I look forward to the next chapter!

Hey everypony I just wanted to apologize for taking so long for making this chapter let alone this whole story. You see I have the whole story and plot figured out on how to put OC int the equestria girls story line. the problem is is that, this the first and only story I have ever written and I have trouble even making elementary punctuation. so I'm hoping that if there are some of you experienced writers can show me how to write my stories properly and maybe look at my current chapter I am writing and help me out if you can.

Hey everypony I know that you all have been waiting a long time for the next chapter but something went wrong my old computer got a virus and wiped out my entire hard drive so all of the 6,000 words I did is all gone:raritycry: so I'm afraid that its going to be awhile before I can re type this chapter. And like I said I'm sorry😢

If there is anyone who can help me recover my work I would really appreciate it.

i actually have aspergers syndrome myself. though nowadasy it's gotten quite dulled over.

Nice start! I'm curious to see where you're going to take this. :twilightsmile:

lol i don't think you have to worry about sex getting you kicked off here. literally 50% of the stories on this site are of one or more of the mane six getting it on with someone, and they often go into a fair amount of detail too. you have nothing to fear

here's hoping this story hasn't fizzled out.

Can you like, reinforce your grammar and spacing and capitalization? This second chap. is almost unbearable to read. No offense, and by the way, you kinda got a good premise going.

I'm curious as to what you can do next with this story.

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Thanks for telling me, and yes I do have some bad grammar and it's kind of hard thing for me to learn since writing down a story for the first time is a hard thing for me to do.

Hey There Every pony I wanted to post something special today since I just turned 18 today, and to update you guys on why It's taking me so long to update this story. so about 9 months ago I just finished the 5th chapter of this story and I planned to post the 3rd chapter 8 months ago but my computer got a virus some how and it wiped out all of my work and I couldn't get any of it back so I had to restart all my work from chapter 3 all over again. When I started to write it again I got really depressed about losing all that work so I had a bit of a writers block just by trying to remember what I posted. So I'm sorry for letting you all down, but after talking to my family about it I manged to get back on my feet so the 3rd chapter will be posted very soon and I will try to post my other chapters as often as I can. So I hope you'll guys will wish me a Happy 18th birthday🎂

Intresting story, got to ask. will he ask Celestia why Sunset seems to get away with everything she does?

I like the story hope to read the next chapter :scootangel:

Please continue I wait a years your next chapter

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I appreciate the support, I will continue the story but I'm having some trouble proof reading it

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