Sunset Shimmer comes across a nice quiet field. So she decides to have a lie down for a while until she can keep going on her journey.
But just as she starts to lie down for a nap, she hears guitar music coming from the field. When she finds out where the sound is coming from she sees a boy with spiky brown hair and yellow gold skin. He is wearing an orange t-shirt, blue jeans, and black shoes. He is playing his red guitar while riding on a big pig with a blue and green polka dot bandana on his neck. He seems to be giving his owner a ride across the field.
"Well look what he have here Herbert. We seem to have another traveler in our midst." The mysterious boy says calmly.
"Hello my name is Sunset Shimmer, what's your name?" Sunset Shimmer asks as she introduces herself.
"My name is Jingle and this is my faithful companion and friend Herbert." Jingle introduces himself.
"Hi Jingle, hi Herbert," Sunset Shimmer says.
"Oink Oink" says Herbert as he comes up to Sunset's leg and scratches his head against it.
"So what are you two doing out here?" Sunset asks.
"I'm looking for my inspiration." Jingle responds.
"Inspiration?" Sunset says confusedly by Jingle's answer.
"Now, what's a city girl like you doing here?" Jingle asks.
"I… kind of ran away," Sunset Shimmer answers.
"Runaway, why?" Jingle asks, confused by Sunset's answer.
"It's a long story," Sunset Shimmer responds.
"Well you know what they say, you've got to put the past behind you," Jingle advises Sunset as he plays his guitar.
"My problem is not very easy to forget," Sunset responds sadly.
"Don't worry these things take time," Jingle says.
"Really?" Sunset asks.
"Really," Jingle says.
Sunset still feels sad and alone, and then Jingle comes up with an idea.
"Well Shimmer, how will you like to tag along with me and Herbert for a while," Jingle suggests.
"Really, are you sure?" Sunset asks uncertain about Jingle's request.
"I'm sure, besides in your case it will be good for you to travel with others," Jingle advises.
"Uh sure, I guess I can tag along with you for a while," Sunset says grateful for Jingle's request.
"So Jingle where are we going?" Sunset Shimmer asks.
"Well, by my sense of direction we're heading to Manehatten, one of the biggest cities in this country," Jingle answers.
"Wow that's really impressive." Sunset Shimmer says happily.
"Well Shimmer, I'm what some call a shark; you must keep on going forward never back." Jingle says and takes another strum of his guitar.
With that, Sunset Shimmer along with her new friends Jingle and Herbert walk along the road to Manehatten where they will find big buildings, people busy working, and the different sites to see during the day and night.
Alright not bad, it is getting better. Just that, maybe to help out with some of the narration try saying it outloud to yourself. See how it flows when you say it, then if need be ask someone else to give it a read.
Although still a interesting story
Ahm... Chapter 8 is showing up in my Feed alerts, but when I click on the link for it, I just get a "404 - Page Not Found" notification type of thing instead of the chapter itself.
Help?
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Sorry. I accidently put the wrong chapter on this one. I'm going to put the real next chapter right now.
Now it, as well as Chapters 6 and 7 are gone, as well.
What's going on here?
8553838 Okay, cool.
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No. The one you saw earlier was for another story, and I accidently put it on this one. Again, my mistake, and sorry for mistakenly misleading you.
was jingle playing this song? it's got a guitar solo.
I understand what Zecora means! Sunset probably meets herself in the human world 'you own face in sight'
I am seeing an antro Timmon riding Pumba
hakuna Matta
this just cements the image