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TheThirdBomb
I spend far too much time playing BlazBlue. And Guilty Gear. And Dota. It's a wonder to me that i'm still able to get work done.
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What is this a crossover with? I like to be familiar with the material before I read crossovers.
8547043
The franchise in question would be the BlazBlue series of fighting games.
The lore's a bit, ah, well...Ridiculous, at times.
One of the reasons why I like BlazBlue. The lore. Confusing as balls at first and for awhile, but once you start getting the ball rolling, the lore is great.
8547860
Absolutely! Hopefully, however, I shouldn't be required to write out too much more of it, because that first half of the chapter from an outsider's perspective must have made absolutely zero sense.
Not bad, though the real question is whether or not it'll get off the ground. A lot of these Your Human and You stories don't finish, or even get more than a few thousand words.
8548917
Well i'm not sure what I can do to assuage that fear, and I can't promise overly much given how my last story stopped recieving updates for months on end without anything said about it.
I should really get around to that sometime, even though this has grown in popularity much, much faster.
I don't know much about this Hazama guy other than I like him. Might have to consider getting one of the BlazeBlue games.
8551228
If you're into fighting games, absolutely go for it! Centralfiction is the latest release, and Calamity Trigger is the first one. Unless you really care for the story or are short on money, go for CF. It has the most characters and best optimisation.
Poor Polly :(
I really enjoy this story. Though I still curious if Polly will get her chance. ;P
8551514
You want the truth? I haven't even given much thought to it.
I have a general idea of where I want the plot to go, but right now i'm getting the introductions out of the way.
Glad you're enjoying it, though!
8551539
Naw, it's alright, I was just thinking about since most YHAY go with the character being paired with a pony because of sentience and humans being little more than animals but I have wanted to see something like that happen in a story other than just a mention in one story I've read before.
8551548
True. Very true.
I haven't actually read many side-stories to YHAY if I might confess, but the ones that I have followed do indeed follow that trend.
I'm still not sure if I want to include Max in this universe, actually. I probably won't, all things considered, because otherwise the Mane Six would already be familiar with intelligent Humans. But I digress, i'm rambling.
Most I can say for now is that ending up with a Human is a...Possibility... But Hazama isn't really the romance type. Like, at all. I might find some character development to change that later, but for now he'd sooner stomp someone into the ground mercilessly than fall in love.
Definitely happening later, if he himself gets matched with anyone at all.
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I look forward to what will happen.
I just took a quick look and no matter what his situation is, I hope he isn't going to be a pushover, I had enough of those characters again this week.
I should really start at the beginning but in a way I like it that he tries to keep up the appearance at the moment, acting like he is an animal I mean.
he should act normal and intelligent everytime only Rainbow is seeing it, just to frustrate her. I think I take a quik look at start at the beginning then, I'm just to curious.
i think this is going to be far better than I thought it would be at first.
Im no brony but this story is pretty good the premise is interesting and i like the decision to take away his ability to speak its making the interactions an interesting comedic variation of show dont tell i enjoy the idea of a villain in a vulnerable situation where they cant use their powers but arent completely defenseless
8556795
Well thank you for thinking so!
If I might pry, what made you think it wouldn't be good in the first place? I'm sure you meant nothing by it, but i'm quite curious to say the least.
I'll try and answer the rest of your comments in order of posting.
1) He is absolutely not going to be a pushover. I hate crossover stories where a character from a really powerful series in general just loses to the mane six for the sake of power balance. If you put a strong character in a series weaker than them, the first thing I hate seeing is the utter uselessness that some authors portray their characters in.
Take, for example, a Skullgirls crossover with MLP I once saw on this site where Painwheel enters Equestria. I don't know if you know what Skullgirls is, but put simply Painwheel would systematically destroy basically every MLP character up to maybe Discord and definitely Tirek.
But for the sake of having a dark, feelsy plot, they made the character act like an utter retard when fighting the Mane Six, only to then have her captured and chained up (somehow) and then break down into tears when Twilight reads her mind for the sake of speeding up the plot.
Put short: no. Hazama is not going to resign himself to their whims, unless he believes it will help him achieve his goals.
2) Yeah. I thought about making him try and prove himself to them, but he's definitely worked in Intelligence for long enough to see the value of the disguise he's been given.
3) Pardon, but i'm curious. Why did you start in the middle to begin with? It seems like an odd decision, though I guess I can understand wanting to see if the story is actually going anywhere.
8556804
The thing is, outside of his Azure Grimoire, he does have access to his powers, it's just that it's not to his advantage to use them.
The talking thing is a no-go, however. Unless he finds some way of remotely activating his Grimoire, which shouldn't be possible because as stated it requires a verbal command from Hazama himself.
8556913
I remember a story where they would more or less just rain down planets at the character
.....no it is bad like you said.
I think I have seen the story, not sure if I was annoyed about it, but I'm pretty sure it didn'T sit right with me to see her being beaten by the main six.
8556913
For point 3)
I just wanted to figure out if this story, that has a similar name like one that I had read once, would turn out like said story.
I really hated what they did with that other story, how.....weird the world was in my eyes and the main char was okay with getting raped and everything from Twilight, just because she was affected slightly by some magic and .......nope I stop here that would just make me angry again. Think of a rape victim that would shout at the police for trying to caught the bad guy.
you could say I just don't want everyone of the important characters to just sleep with each other like there is no tomorrow when there aren't any feelings involved, that is just not my taste if the story isn't meant to be a clopstory.
8557124
I think the story you're angry at is actually the original 'Your Human And You' Story, which spawned all these spinoffs, including mine.
It's also the 'universe' I was referring to in my PM to you.
Well nice enough, I hope that if you take some blazeblue villains, that you don'T let the storie be swarmed with action. In my eyes there should be a fair amount of slice of life moments too, but I enjoy the time when they probably notice that he is never harmed after some sort of accident (like with those affected humans). I'm kind of hoping that if he was standing in the middle of beaten enemies, that they notice that too, I don't need them to figure him out yet, but I want them to notice that he could handle himsel and not completely ignoring what I think I have seen in the last chapter.
I like that as long as they don'T make the human animal thing to weird. (like already mentioned a few times, I just had an bad example)
Despite my fear this being like the other story (sorry that I mention it so often^^), this is pretty nice, funny and carfree till now. (if I can call it that).
yeaaaaahh weeeelllll I remembered the other story again.
I kind of hope Applejack doesn't have a human farm and is letting "every" human she has having a turn with her. Not sure if it is the animal X smart stuff, or if it is the harem aspect I don't like there.
I hardly got used to stories in which a character has more than three partners. I never liked the behavior with people sleeping with just about anyone when I was in school, I take it a bit more serious in stories I have to admit.
Now after I had read a bit after that sentence I got the idea she meant the humans doing it and kind of having a spontanous orgy, well it is a nicer thought for me. Maybe you know the feeling but I never liked my favourite chars or one of the important once acting to "what I would consider" slutty.
well nothing is comfirmed yet and I still hope she kind of has a favourite pet and not 5 or 10.
That is a pretty funny moment again.
No I had even read a combination of a Timberwold and a main char in a relationship, so either it is because of real feelings or really only that harem thing I dislike in some stories.
Either they tried to attack Sweetie or nearly did it with her.
I like Hazama
8551280
I like fighting games, but I always lost interesst when trying to seriously learn the combos.
8551539 I noticed the curious wish from another reader.
I would maybe be okay with Poll getting her wish if she would kind of get a bit creative in her attempts in the future. I like to think that him being there could cause different reactions from her, maybe her starting to learn from him as tiny as it may be, that could be the first time they get a bit smarter.
However I think I would prefer it if he get's together with a human when he is admiting to one that he is intelligent.
Maybe with one human and a pony?, afterall he would kind of need to keep up the act and.......not sure if that would help them, but for some reason I thought that would be a good reason. However in that chase they would either have to get Polly to live with them or him agreeing to keep up the act (again with the thought of him having a pony lover and them needing to make others think that she make sure every of his need are take cared of).
Not sure if it would be a bad thing in this ponyville if they would openly admit to do it with a human, but I like to think this universe in your story isn't completely like that.
8551579
I hope he rather falls in love than just having his fun or at least him being picky. Yep I really don't like the idea of him maybe joyning the orgy.
Overall this is a nice story and much better than what I'm used to.
this was funny and clever even if it might confuse Fluttershy further of his changing behavior. I like that you try to do something different, I always try to mention it like writing some characters with a different personality or just because Rainbow is acting brave and everything, it wouldn't have to mean that she couldn't get nervous in romantic things.
I kind of hoped he would beat them in front of them in a way that is only questionable.
8557173
well I mostly hated the applejack scene which I kind of hope you don't feel the need to include exactly like that and that he hardly had any good reasons for what he did there. I only remember that I had some people that agreed with me on that one, even if I'm not trying to prove a point with that.
I only know that in my stories I don't like the main chars or the characters that are more important to act like what some would describe as sluts. Some people like it and some don't.
This story is very good so far and I'm not even sure which reason would exist that this story couldn't live without appleslut. I don't mind some ponies doing it with their humans, but Applejack enjoying her human farm took it a bit to far for me.
That and Twilight raping her human and him totally defending her in front of Celestia.
I say it again, I really like your story so far and I hope you don't feel the need to include that too, at least not with Applejack or preferable any of the main six, even if it should be a spinoff that one thing isn't the most important one from the story.
I think that is what they wanted. (if you could answer my question about Applejack it would be nice, I like this story, but it is probably not changing the reaction I will have towards applejack might being the same like in the original story, that won'T change whenever you are telling me about in a pm or not.
Sorry if that should annoy you, but that could maybe really ruin it for me, I would prefer it if Applejack would have a human pet beside Winona, that would be something that I could accept if it involves sex. I only don't really like Applejack doing it with her whole barn.
I make sure that I don't mention it everytime now, you don't need a full explanation all the time.
However if you don't even plan to even write that scene, then I suppose I can live with that too. I won't give you a thumb down just because that, I know that is just something I don'T like that much and other seems to like it.
This was a nice chapter even if i had wished they would have already noticed that he somehow was able to fight back, but I guess they don't even expect the humans to be able to do a concentrated attack that would have a certain result. (I feel like I messed that sentence up with my grammar.)
You get my upvote now.
8558690
Well the whole point of tipping the stall onto them and not using any of his weapons to injure them was to make sure that nobody realised it was him.
However, the Guard are there and investigating, so they could know something that Hazama didn't consider, and Rainbow Dash is still on the lookout. Plus, Fluttershy has seen him smile, which Humans shouldn't be able to do in that world.
And this whole Applejack thing. I'm not 100% sure what you're asking, but no, I don't intend to have her doing it with the whole barn.
8558891
okay thats enough for me to know.
Well in the original story applejack was fucking every day some of their humans she got and like everyone else I have something which can ruin some stories for me, for me it was the applejack thing. However you told me you don't want to do it like that.
ahhh yes, when he smiles he should have a reason to do so, which would mean that his brains works well enough to reconize that which the animals probably aren't really thinking about in this world.
8558948
That and Humans in this universe aren't able to smile or laugh, which is a fact drawn from the original 'Your Human and You' story.
8558953
not at all? huh...i totally forgot about that, in a way it is weird but I don't care for that now.
8559011
I mean I actually like your version better...
So far this is the best displaced fic ive ever seen though sadly the bar isnt very high given most of them are ocs or self insert fics. do you know how many of them are about people from conventions coming to equastria? Far more than there should be i hope more people look at this fic and see that ocs from comicon arent the only thing you can have for crossovers
8561455
That's...Extraordinarily high praise, and i'm very glad to hear it, don't get me wrong! I'm confident, however, that there are much, much better Human-In-Equestria fics than mine.
I'm still believing in Stalliontown.
8561455
or humans being turned into anime characters which should have their own personality but suddenly start acting like the real once which can make the point of being a former human useless.
8561971
I haven't read many and despite my complaints or wariness, I don't think that the others are much better than this one. I bet half of them are maybe actually copying the original story to much.
Oh yes I liked this chapter and are kind of sad that this was the only good update I had this morning.
8562077
Oh god don't even get me started. That concept alone just fails on literally every level.
First, if you have a Human turn into a character and have them keep their own personality, it ruins the entire fun of having that character in Equestria, hence my dislike for essentially all 'displaced' stories.
Secondly, you could have a Human turn into a character but that gain their personality too, and then my problem is why the hell would you bother having the Human part to begin with?!
If I wanted to see a character I really liked in Equestria, I wouldn't bother making them start off as a Human, or have a Human basically wearing their skin and having their powers.
8562127
Well I think I only like the psychological aspect of them being another person or something, but yes I understand you. Somehow I think that only starts to be a problem in some chases.
1.I remember human turned ponies with some kind of guide that is telling them everything there is to know about the world right away, ruining the fun of him figuring it out themself.
2.self inserts with OP characters can make it worse I suppose.
3. The overdone complicated stuff with the "displacersa", the higher being and masters to the displaced.
4. Characters learning attack that aren'T exactly supposed to work with their own character (why not choosing the character that has those attacks?
yep, that is my main problem here. Honestly I only have seen three or four displaced stories I liked really much from the start.
I think it would really work better sometimes if they have the real char with the real experiences and not the crazy guy thinking he really had all those adventures.
There are some people that can make it look good if they write themself in the characters position, but often enough it would look better if they just take the real characters with everything that makes him look like the real deal. ( I hope that makes sense, it does in my mind)
8562216
And it doesn't help that most displaced stories go the exaaaaact same way.
So yeah, I'm not fond of those...
8562238
I praise the author everytime that part is either missing or he just get's his stuff from some random asshole on the street.
well yes maybe a different town would be nice to avoid the usual stuff with Celestia or the main six ordering him around or overpowering him, or he overpowers them.
8562238
I like those stories more that are just human turned into somebody, they somehow manage to look much better than human turned into somebodey because of evil cosplay guy. Not sure why but I feel that is the chase.
or has suddenly mastered them right away, which suddenly makes them an overconfident asshole, a tyrant or the wisest ruler of them all.
I remember a displaced story about Disagea and a crossover that happened, where again some kind of asshole displaced visited the world and was acting like he knew anything better. That guy had no respect for the princesses, ignored that he maybe doesn't knows anything about that world and....was op.
oh wow now that you say it seems to true, why not Rarity or someone else being in her horseshoes? I think the characters can actually show different emotions than how they are portrayed in the show or some stories.
yep to often it happens to much in those stories without the plot to continue.
Then there are some that use their crossovers like some kind of cheat or I feel like the crossover charactes only help to mess up in that world.
I'm not much of a fan of rape or sex without feelings in stories like I told you already, but I totally liked one fallout story and suddenly a crossover character kind of raped the main char in front of their eyes. (I mean she was letting it happen, but it made the characters from the story suddenly so weird because they were shown to act differently) Long story short, I sometimes get the feeling like those crossovers change the OC's to much sometimes, like they are completely different characters afterwards. Maybe I overdo it with my accusing right now, but that's what I get when I search in my memory.
I totally understand what you mean, there is rarely a displaced story where I don't loose interest after a while.
I love it cant wait for the next chapter.
Nice very nice, this always ends in a way that makes me sad for not having more.
I also liked that he managed to avoid her again, I was hoping that would happen when he would read the expression on her face.
That was just perfect.
Will he get his voice back at some point?
Yeah no you are underselling your self this is by dar the most realistic human in equestria fic ive ever seen especially as a crossover most fics go with yeah there are talking horses dont think about it too much reaction this one of thebast bevause its not a hero going to equastria its a villain who is subtle about his evil its like lelouch vi brittania going to equestria or even better dio brando going to equestria the possibilities are endless yet no one has done this kind of story til now except for the oc heavy overlord fics
8563273
I can't answer in either direction without it being a spoiler so... Sorry!
I think you used an asterisk instead of this. >>>>
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