The blast she had suffered was made of pure chaotic flame straight from the heart of discord himself. And now, as he had done for 10,999 years, 11 months, 29 days, 23 hours, 57 minutes, a single tear rolled down the golden armor. The green rust long since embedded into his helmet; a reminder of his failure to protect them.
It's not clear if it's Discord's armor or Shining armor caught the tear. A quick tweak could make this part clearer.
Awesome.
One issue
It's not clear if it's Discord's armor or Shining armor caught the tear.
A quick tweak could make this part clearer.
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Fixed and thank you.