Princess Luna begins to grow weary of constantly living under the glow of her older sister. She fights to keep her unrest from boiling over into violence. Simple jealousy can turn into hatred and spite at any moment. She needs to keep her emotions in check, if not for her sake, but for Celestia's.
Wow
very good
Grammer could've been better, but a decent story nonetheless.
a luna fan we have here, do we not?
I liked it :o)
I usually write her ‘cute’ by I like angry Luna too.
A pegasus named -- Past tense in what is otherwise present tensed. A pegasus with the name? A pegasus by the name of?
No one could really tell -- No can really tell, another tense slip.
found herself -- finds herself? The tense is confusing in this paragraph.
Review posted: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/212612/hidden-gems/thread/344390/in-the-suns-shadow
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Love interest? Wha?
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I misread a thing, likely? That wasn't a large factor.
Many years since you've been here, but as I remember you from the UK of Equestria days I decided to read and review anyway. An interesting way to begin the story, and not covering the actual banishment was bold as well. Luna seems excessively hot-tempered, though.