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Typical red neck.
Good on you for including the word sequence "for for far far" in a sentence without straying from the grammatically correct path.
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Thanks for the compliment, had to debate that one in my head for an hour. And what's a story without gratuitous alliterative appeal of any kind?
So she fucks with a Guy, make him passout from orgasm, but get pregmant with Just One shot from her brother?
Could not she take a pill?
You mean Macbloom, right?
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Holy crap, did not notice that till you pointed it out. How embarrassing.
this was an enjoyably good story, i done liked it.
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I enjoy the fact that you enjoyed it.
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Yes. A good sold clopfic, and with two of my top five favorite fetishes no less, incest and unwanted impregnation.
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I live to serve. And write. Mostly write.
Enjoyed immensely, but two inconsistencies I wanted to point out:
1. First claims that Mac is asexual (which if he was, he wouldn’t be yanking it in the shower), then states he has a high libido.
2. Claims Mac hasn’t orgasmed in three months, then states he had sex with Scootaloo a week prior. I for one can’t imagine not cumming inside Scootaloo. Also implies that Mac has been cheating on Sugar.
Other than that, very glad I found this among the Derpi comments section. You painted a beautiful backstory picture of a very sexually active CMC and family, and I wish more writers/artists had the forethought to add those tiny but juicy details.
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The Asexual bit applies to his psychological indifference to sex, but his libido is the physical desire/biological inclination to have sex. I might have mixed up "libido" with something more appropriate, but its meant to be more of a body overruling the mind type scenario. Like an erection that won't go down even when you honestly don't want to use it, till you just go along with it.
And asexuals do masturbate, but it's mostly just for the orgasm, not the sex. Compare it to snacking when not hungry. Mac did so to get rid of the erection and enjoy the dopamine.
I should've been more precise in my description of Mac's encounters with Sweetie and Scootaloo. He banged Scootaloo a week before Sweetie, both of which were at least two to three months before Sugar came around. Though he is cheating on Sugar, but with Bloom. Sugar's asleep in his room as the two bang.
Like I said, I could've done better.
Edit: Of course he came in Scoots and Sweetie. He just hasn't done so recently because he got involved with Sugar, but she couldn't take it like they could so he's pent up.
“List fueled daze” dont ya mean Lust?
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Dang, I swore I had taken care of that.
*holds beer*
*takes sip*
Now that escalated quickly.
Oh thank god, it was a good thing you specifies that 'wise I'd have to be callin' them BFI folks.
All things aside, this was as blatantly porny as blatant porn can blatantly be, but I'll be damned if it didn't have my engorged attention all of the way through.
Yes, I said engored. Bravo! Good job! Encore, encore!
One minor critique:
The asexual but is just plain confusing. It doesn't make any sense and it's an unnecessary detail that, quite honestly, you could've done better without. Everything in the story, including the story itself, is acting in contravention of what the majority accepted definition of asexual actually is and it just kind of feels ... odd.
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Thanks for the critique.
Yeah, decided to have Mac be a fellow asexual fellow who does partake in sex every so often, but wrote and edited this story in as many days as it took to get the go to publish it. The result is jerky lines that don't mix as well.
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