When will you do one with Rainbow Dash?

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I'll work on Rainbow Dash next

Awesome chapter!

Rarity is so awesome! I like the way she knocked out that bully! Go Rarity!

Ugh the suspense is killing me how much longer till the next chapter

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it's almost done

The protagonist sounds Bostonian in my head...which isn't a bad thing. (I'm 6'5" and a native Floridian.) Whenever the author can give the "you" in a 2nd person story a distinct personality, other than that provided by your own experience, it allows for one to truly immerse themselves in a different perspective!

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well said

I like the story allot but the whole short thing and all the people getting on him about it even in public just doesn’t make sense, to me at least, for I’m 5’5 and no one cares about my height at all if anything I actually have a good amount of people listen to me even though I’m this short. The only time I had problems with being called short was in middle school and I was shorter then what I am now. Then again I fought back even stabbed a kid with a pencil but still just the whole thing with people saying shit about His height just doesn’t make sense to me at least idk maybe it’s because I live in NC?

"The hell's that shrimp doing with a girl like her?"

"Mommy, why's that lady holding hands with a shorty?"

"Psh, she could do better than that."

"Why is that loser getting all grabby with her?"

"I'd have dumped him for being so short if I was her."

Oh my god. No-one's going to care! Maybe if it was in high school I could understand, but in the real world? And with children?

He's not even that short! He's only 5'6"! If he was 4'10" or something, I could understand him being a dwarf, but he's not that short! Why are so many people noticing!?

At least he's got heart and he happens to be the most kindest and caring, not to mention, the most handsome man I've ever met!

Yeah! I only met him yesterday for a few minutes and knew him to be a violent man before then, but he is the kindest man I know!

And really? You're going to have attack him with a bag full of bricks? Because that's the Rarity we all know.

Why are you giving a reason why the protagonist is short? Can't he just be so? Can't you just say he grew to be short rather than making some excuse about how he got sick a lot and "the medication delayed his growth spurt" (to which it's still very much delayed even after his graduation, I might add)?

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Yes. I came here to read what looked like at least a decent porn fluff story, perhaps even more if I was lucky, Then I found out that I didn't like the story and I started talking about what I didn't like about it in the comments. Or shouting, really, in that comment at least. I was getting quite angry with the story in this chapter. I didn't realise that, because it's a work of fiction, it must be protected from all criticism.

"I'd have dumped him for being so short if I was her."

*Has flashbacks to a Dharr Mann video*

"No, just a few bricks. There's a garden in my backyard and every time I see a discarded brick I just pick it up and stash it away in my purse. I have three in here, so it was naturally enough."

This is a reference to something.

It has to be.

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101 Dalmatians reference