Sunset Shimmer makes an urgent and impromptu visit to Princess Twilight's castle. It does not go as expected.
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Why is this marked as complete, it doesn't feel complete.
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Becauuuusssseeee....
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ditto!
This need more. What happens next!? There is a lot of potential there.
Honestly, I didn't like this one-shot quite as much as your other one, largely because of how little there was to it. It started off on the right track, but when the punchline came it just didn't quite strike me as effectively as you probably hoped it would.
That being said, the beginning does make me want to see something from you regarding Sunset reminiscing about the good old days when visiting Equestria.
How about Sunset Shimmer vs. Flurry Heart?
XD Discord making the defenses like that was hilarious! I feel like this could be continued.
Nkhaniyo inali yabwino! Ndinkakonda kukula kwa khalidwe ndi momwe munasinthira pakati pa zithunzi! Kulongosola kwanu kunandipangitsa kukhala wokondwa ndipo ndikuyembekeza kuti mukuchita bwino! Onetsetsani kuti musaike msuzi muchapa zovala!
See? Discord gets it. Discord gets the connection!
Is a really good story, but i don't get, why Discord is laughing? Is the resemblance between Twilight and Sunset Shimmer names? I think so.
Good story so far, but Twilight is not going to like it when she find out what Discord is going.
Yeah, I'm not too sure why Discord is laughing. If I had to guess, I'd have to say it's because he called it when he guessed her name last chapter, though, that wouldn't explain Sunset trying to essentially kill him.
She let Discord manage the security system? Yeah, no way that could possibly backfire.
Ah, that makes more sense.
With a name that sexy......
Oh heavens! Red-colored unicorns!
I think you meant 'rogue' rather than 'rouge'. Tiny difference there.
This story is going to go long at this rate, I but I can bet I know who's got the friendship problem right now, it's Sunset and Discord themselves.
Well, at least they're trying. Though something tells me the problem's staring them right in the face.
This friendship problem in the chapter screams Ace Attorney.
This was an excellent story, with two characters I've seldom seen working together. However, I'm curious; what did Sunset see? Will there be a story detailing her attempts to apologize? I would love to read that.
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Really glad you enjoyed the story.
There will NOT be a story about what Sunset saw.
Yep, not surprised at this ending. Not complaining either.
I would like to see Sunset meeting Flurry Heart.
Well, there's my new word of the day.
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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Will not be happening, sorry. At least not from me. Let me know if you find a good one though, that sounds like a good story idea!
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But oddly enough not “Objection!”
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Sunset Shimmer is Mad About Everything by Justice3442.
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He's laughing because Sunset and Twilight have basically the same name. She's assaulting him because he's basically mocking her.
April 22nd? That's my birthday!
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We learn something new everyday! You're welcome.
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Happy (late b/c of April) Birthday!
If said bridge is Discord, yes.
Interesting story and similar to the The Parent Map, with Discord and Sunset substituting for Sunburst and Starlight (Too many ponies with similar names
). I wouldn’t mind actually seeing this as an actual episode of either show. Think it would pretty amusing. Thumbs up and favorite from me.
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Thank you so much!
Hm. The thing about this I wasn't expecting was that the map would still be intact and untouched by the end, rather than become an integral part of the prank Sunset and Discord bond over because really, neither of them are inclined to accept a smug Twilight without retaliation. ...But I'll just assume they haven't gotten that far yet.
Apart from a few choice moments, like with the knockout gas, this feels like an actual episode. I mean in a good way, where it's light-hearted and contained. It teaches an important and believable friendship lesson as well. This was quite the enjoyable ride.
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So glad you enjoyed it!
"Here you go!" Pinkie said as she appeared from nowhere, bowl outstretched in her hooves.
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Whoops, that's totally something Pinkie would do. ^^; She was...um...busy?? Yeah I got nothin'.
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The rouge unicorn is a well-recognized precursor to a red and black alicorn OC. Green Knockout Gas of Friendship is usually a good idea in that case.
Now this is really good :)
I thought Sunset going to giggle Joker style
When using a colon or semi-colon, it's not the same as starting a new sentence; the first word after it shouldn't be capitalized unless it's a proper noun, place, or title.
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There's one thing in common with every single fimfic I have read that has Discord in it Discord just plain loves to hear himself talk and does not shut up
Shouldn't this have a Discord character tag?
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Well, he is a narcissist.
Liked the story, and would have loved to get a "That's it?! That map sends us on a quest just to get us to play nicey-nicey with each other???!!!" out of one or both of them.
I've also a few objections. OK, fine, Discord and Sunset made up and parted on good terms. The thing is, Discord assaulted Sunset, and falsely imprisoned/detained her. Discord is like the police officer who arrests someone just for daring to smile at them. Discord abused his relationship with Twilight along with his power to do literally anything he wants, hurting Sunset in the process. And no one should ever be put in a situation where they are basically forced to play nice with an abuser. Sure, Sunset has forgiven him, but when it comes right down to it, She will never be able to look at that portal without thinking about what Discord did. I kind of feel like this needs a follow-up where Sunset and Twilight are able to spend some time together.