I am liking this, a fun story so far. Just... this really needs some prereading. Some sections are just rife with mispellings and incorrect word choices. That messiness can turn off a lot of readers who can't stand the number of mistakes. A little more polish before publishing will really do wonders. Good luck and happy writing.
8463247 I'm happy your enjoying the story so far and thank you for taking time on commenting. I deffinatly need to work on need to work on proofreading better. I do read the story about three two four times and I do find a few mistakes but I always seem to miss some. With word choices I always struggle with I do usally second guess my self on them. I am trying to get better with writting and probably some day I probably will come back and fix the mistakes.
8461984 Thank you for commenting on almost every chapter and that you've liked the story so far. aslo Starlight will be addicted but dont worry she'll be the one to stop this, if it can be.
8463294 Sometimes reading it out loud can help, you hear the issue better than you see it, particularly if it's something you wrote there is the habit of glossing over exactly what is written for what you meant. That's why a second pair of eyes can really help in making something ready for publication.
Another great chapter I hope Starlight dosent get hooked because it would be good if Starlight has to save everyone hope you can update soon please
I am liking this, a fun story so far. Just... this really needs some prereading. Some sections are just rife with mispellings and incorrect word choices. That messiness can turn off a lot of readers who can't stand the number of mistakes. A little more polish before publishing will really do wonders. Good luck and happy writing.
8463247
I'm happy your enjoying the story so far and thank you for taking time on commenting. I deffinatly need to work on need to work on proofreading better. I do read the story about three two four times and I do find a few mistakes but I always seem to miss some. With word choices I always struggle with I do usally second guess my self on them. I am trying to get better with writting and probably some day I probably will come back and fix the mistakes.
8461984
Thank you for commenting on almost every chapter and that you've liked the story so far. aslo Starlight will be addicted but dont worry she'll be the one to stop this, if it can be.
8463294
Sometimes reading it out loud can help, you hear the issue better than you see it, particularly if it's something you wrote there is the habit of glossing over exactly what is written for what you meant. That's why a second pair of eyes can really help in making something ready for publication.
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That is actually really great advice I'm probably going to use thank you