Unsung: Rivers of Listerine

After a tragic experience with a dare, Rainbow makes a hasty trip to Wall-Mart, more specifically, to the oral hygiene aisle.

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Bronycommander

Bronycommander #1 · Aug 20th, 2017 · 1 · ·

funny Story, i'm sure she beat him up After that.

Mr cold ghost

Mr cold ghost #2 · Aug 20th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Yep I really dislike zephyr breeze too. I knew a few people like him in real life and I disliked them too.

Disavowed ASH

Disavowed ASH #3 · Aug 20th, 2017 · 3 · ·

Christ, I would punch him so hard that my arm would go through his chest and the pullout his heart like I was some sort of insane Kung-Fu master.

Damn Rainbow. The only thing that can cure you of that experience involves Ice Cram and Soarin's dick. Trust me, it's the only way.

Lord Weesus Christ

Lord Weesus Christ #4 · Aug 20th, 2017 · 3 · ·

Instantly thought of this when they were driving to Wal-Mart

Tony Montana

Tony Montana #5 · Aug 20th, 2017 · 4 · ·

I should probably buy Zephyr some mouthwash

No, Fluttershy, use sulphuric acid instead. It'll be more effective on him.

CoffeeMinion

CoffeeMinion #6 · Aug 21st, 2017 · 2 · ·

I feel like I probably shouldn't laugh, but I'm laughing. Zephyr is written as an awful cad here, and poor Rainbow's suffering both feels real and is a delight to read. The action toward the beginning is strong! The humor works throughout. Overall good stuff and well-executed.

Speckle

Speckle #7 · Aug 24th, 2017 · 1 · ·

I enjoyed this more than I thought The odds are very high that I'd do exactly what RD did if it were me in her position (minus the whole AIDS thing; I would be too busy screaming bloody murder to say much else. I'm a bit of a germaphobe ).

Zephyr Breeze sounds uber gross in this timeline: I recommend a sequel where he gets his comeuppance.

Dustchu

Dustchu #8 · Oct 6th, 2017 · · ·

WOW. I forgot to reply to these, I'm such a dick!

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Probably, I wouldn't put it past her

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He's a garbage tier pony, nothing more

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Rip his heart out! And ice Cream would probably do good, not so sure about Soarin's dick though sounds like a good way to get aids. But who knows? XD Hehehe, thanks!