962060 I toned down my writing because I wanted to try and make something that was Teen rated. Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs wasn't just about trying to reach a wider audience. The story I wanted to tell didn't call for any graphic descriptions of sex, so I thought a Teen rating was appropriate.
In seeing how far I could straddle the ratings line with adult humor, I went too far. Even if a story doesn't have graphic descriptions of sex in it, the inclusion of sexual humor will earn it a mature rating.
Why would the health inspector get mad about them not having all the samples put away? And what's wrong if they spill a little bit of it? Accidents happen.
Dude seriously you have made me laugh and nearly puke about 3 times now. Chugging sperm samples thats just wrong and gross......but......but......I just couldn't stop reading. Ugh btw chinese and mexican food does NOT taste good the 2nd time around expecualy when mixed.
I still love your writing tough! Ok, now im going to get something to drink.
Well I must say that was the weirdest take on the I Love Lucy conveyor belt scene I have ever witnessed.
Also dammit Caramel. You don't just run into places like that. You need to have a plan that has a greater than thirty something percent chance of being useful in some significant way. Oh well atleast Scootaloo is somewhere safe.
O__O What the actual fuck? I'm torn between a continuous disturbed stare at my screen and uncontrollable laughter. I hope the inspector either has a great sense of humor or unwavering sympathy. We'll see.
Due to the new rule, this has been upgraded to mature because of the adult humor. Whether some readers realize it or not, a lesbian couple chugging down stallion semen does count as mature humor.
962292 I only upped the anti to sample slurping after it was determined that I wouldn't be able to get a Teen rating for this story due to 'adult humor.' Had this remained Teen rated, I still would have included this chapter, but it would have needed to be altered of course.
All these references All these Rofl worthy moments All this waiting for the next chapter I totally had a clue what would happen as soon as a clean room with a conveyor belt was mentioned, but I didn't care, I enjoyed it all that much more Keep it up! and thanks for not trying to get that teen rating back, this is much better
... My eye is twitching from a combination of laughter and pure 'wtf'-ness.
Good job, keep it up.
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Adult Humor.
That was...enlightening. Funny... but disturbing.
Whenever this updates, it fees like Christmas. Poor, Lyra and Bon Bon, they were so close...
Yeah, whatever happened to keeping this rated Teen, hmm?
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Ooooh, talk about bad timing.
Sweet Celestia Macintosh, filling an entire cryobank in two go's?
God dammit Caramel.
Wow.
Wow, just...
There be a shit-storm a'brewin!
962071 Big Mac's Apple seed didn't flood the cryobank, or anything. It just made a sizable puddle in the lobby.
Awww shit.
Damn that was hilarious
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: "Eeeeyup. After all..."
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: "Ah DO get all the bitches for a reason."
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Oh god, they drank gallons of sperm and after all that, Caramel barged in and bucked everything up.
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I toned down my writing because I wanted to try and make something that was Teen rated. Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs wasn't just about trying to reach a wider audience. The story I wanted to tell didn't call for any graphic descriptions of sex, so I thought a Teen rating was appropriate.
In seeing how far I could straddle the ratings line with adult humor, I went too far. Even if a story doesn't have graphic descriptions of sex in it, the inclusion of sexual humor will earn it a mature rating.
Why would the health inspector get mad about them not having all the samples put away? And what's wrong if they spill a little bit of it? Accidents happen.
I'm going to be sick why....WHY????
Dude seriously you have made me laugh and nearly puke about 3 times now. Chugging sperm samples thats just wrong and gross......but......but......I just couldn't stop reading. Ugh btw chinese and mexican food does NOT taste good the 2nd time around expecualy when mixed.
I still love your writing tough! Ok, now im going to get something to drink.
I saw the I love Lucy reference a mile away. Also I love this story so far. Keep up the good work.
oh fuck. they're screwed. As soon as I read, "Eeeeyup," I facehoofed. What will AJ have to say about this?
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962022 They chugged Jizz
how is that not mature
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What's 'I Love Lucy?' I was referencing The Last Roundup's cherry sorting scene. JK!
But seriously, thanks for the feedback!
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Well I must say that was the weirdest take on the I Love Lucy conveyor belt scene I have ever witnessed.
Also dammit Caramel. You don't just run into places like that. You need to have a plan that has a greater than thirty something percent chance of being useful in some significant way. Oh well atleast Scootaloo is somewhere safe.
all I could say at the end was OH SHIIIIIII
O__O
What the actual fuck?
I'm torn between a continuous disturbed stare at my screen and uncontrollable laughter. I hope the inspector either has a great sense of humor or unwavering sympathy. We'll see.
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It's karma, Lyra. You act too pushy towards Caramel, and even when he forgives you, karma will still find a way to knock you down a peg.
Thanks for the feedback!
Due to the new rule, this has been upgraded to mature because of the adult humor. Whether some readers realize it or not, a lesbian couple chugging down stallion semen does count as mature humor.
Saw Lucy moment a mile away. Never found Lucy moments that funny. Not sure why.
I love this fic.
my reaction to the end
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"The two mares frantically guzzled cup after cup, filling their mouths until their cheeks distended."
Is that an I Love Lucy reference?
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I only upped the anti to sample slurping after it was determined that I wouldn't be able to get a Teen rating for this story due to 'adult humor.' Had this remained Teen rated, I still would have included this chapter, but it would have needed to be altered of course.
im at the part were Colheart is about to start the conveyer belt...... please dont let this turn into an I Love Lucy twist
As soon as I saw that there were four cups instead of two I thought "where is this going?"
Turns out I was right; my reactions went in this order
Goddamnit...... on the other hoof tho
Lyra, Bon-Bon, You can't drink all that Jizz, you'll get a wicked bad tummy-ache!
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"That's future Lyra and Bon Bon's problem."
Oh God, how much of that stuff did Big Mac produce?
Good story though
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That was sickeningly hilarious!
I had a feeling they were going to end up having to swallow a new line of work.
This story is both sickening and hilarious, and Atylonisus is doing it as an audiobook.
nothing but pure epic win. Keep it up!
I feel like I'm about to puke.
Oh welldl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png , this chapter was worth it.
fucking Caramel...
All these references
All these Rofl worthy moments
All this waiting for the next chapter
I totally had a clue what would happen as soon as a clean room with a conveyor belt was mentioned, but I didn't care, I enjoyed it all that much more
Keep it up! and thanks for not trying to get that teen rating back, this is much better
Sing with me, everypony!
"I Jizz in my saddlebags"
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*Cackles evilly*
Wow, no gag reflex Lyra and Bonbon? :D
More!
Cheers
GM
i tasted that...