What's this? Another story from dear old Psycho, and this one has golems? Definitely checking out.

Wow, where to begin with this chapter?

First off, the action was well written, and the descriptions of the individual demons I thought were very interesting. This refugee camp is really intriguing, and I love this golem!

As for Heart Broken, I have a few theories of who it is, but I'll hold my tongue for now and see.

Will be looking into this one more!

>>916078916078 PM? I like to know the thoughts of others.

>>916130916130 Not sure if I will.

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>>916181916181 I know, but it's so fun to go along with it.

Dear Psycho, Will read this when I have time.

Promise.

Halosnake

Dang, I was thinking Trixie. Still Cadence was a nice choice, and those back stories were so sad.

Once again that golem is great. Oh and Cocoon is adorable

>>917777917777 Why did you think it was going to be Trixie? Also, I surmise that this is one of those stories I make with a complex backstory and upon which only you will comment again.

>>917972917972 I have my reasons, but I won't say them here. *looks around suspiciously*

Perhaps it's because they're not used to it from you?

>>917977917977 You know where to "say" them, then.

>>917978917978 Yes, but where will I find a raven at this hour?

>>917995917995 In a bowl, moisturizing in some fresh, cold lava.

This is what we call aggressive negotiations. And why does everyone want to kill cocoon? She is just trying to protect her people.

>>930996930996 Because demons like to attack what is small and puny to them. She was small and powerless, so, why not get an easy kill?

>>931099931099 because then a golem will kill you.

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>>931132931132 Score another for Samaru!

Why didn't cadence step in earlier to you know save the changeling queen which keeps their people alive by feeding them? everyone just kind of leaves her to her fate and then cadence says she will throw them out if they don't stop after she gets saved ?

quite a few mistakes too. (just a few here forgot to mark them when I read through so there are still others)

"You rtime on this plane will have been short."

"Your time on this plane will have been short."

"attempts of the little changeling, that i, until said changeling"

"attempts of the little changeling, that is, until said changeling"

"It would seem that, judging by a massive hole behind Rarity and Spike, a substance came out and strengthened the golem. No matter what spell the demon would use, she just couldn't get out."

Pretty convenient for the Golem to suddenly get strengthened by a "Mysterious substance" isn't it? its makes it a bit unbelievable and it makes it feel like you couldn't think of anything better to write and just said "fuck it, this will do"

Well that's my feedback on the story, I am quite liking this so far (Golems are always cool!)

>>997459997459I'll explain in the next chapter while it was "conveniately" placed there. Also, thanks for pointing out the errors. I love to ki-correct them.

I was invested into the golem's back story. I was interested by crazy Pinkie. I was getting into the description of the demon land. I was intrigued by Crimson Pioneer.

Until you said Pumpkin Lord.

Well you see, one day I was aksed to read this story when it happened. The world opened up below me and swallowed me in. I was in utter darkness and groped my way around, searching for a path... However after hours of walking I found I was in a circular room. I had been for hours. I had one option. Attempt to walk to the center. As I did I slowly found that light was being shed around me. Somehow the center o the room was dimly lit. Looking down I saw a covering on the ground. It weighed an immense weight but, struggling the whole way, I got it open. Below was a small drop down to another room. This one had a computer on one side. I made my way to the computer and looked at the files. One was labeled Psy/och.Ill   Opening the file I came across a text document. This is what it read: Congratulations on finding this. You have now achieved enlightenment. Have a good day.

I awoke in my bed screaming. On my computer read a text document saying three words.

You mad bro?

>>11115901111590 Still a comment.

>>11115991111599

Never said it wasn't

I'm sorry, I can't take this guy seriously. Oh sure he sounds intimidating and looks awesome. But that is the silliest name I've ever heard.

>>11171501117150 You aren't disturbed by what Epoch might be doing to her prisoner?

>>11171721117172 *Is to busy laughing to reply*

I'm pretty torn up about which of these Demon Lords I like more.

Also, Golem upgrade!