I am Princess Twilight Sparkle of Friendship. My duty is to the crown and my subjects. I can't allow my heart to weaken my status in Equestria. I can't allow myself to love him...What will everypony think of us if they found out?
My reputation would be tarnished, but worst...what would happen to my beloved?
My duty must always come before love as sad as it may be. A marriage for me must be to somepony of high status.
I love you Flash...but we can only have Stolen Glances.
This story is inspired by the Song Secret love Song by little mix https://youtu.be/qgy7vEje5-w
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Aww, great story. Keep up the good work!
8291910
Thanks
Umm, I want to like this, but it kind of feels like you ripped the dialogue from the lyrics of a song, so the dialogue doesn't quite sound natural. Eh.
8292084
Ditto. Inspire does not equal copy and paste.
8292097
Yep.
Still, I'm pretty sure the Flashlight haters are already starting their bombing run, so I'm not going to give this a dislike. They'll have enough to deal with.
Again, though, props for writing Flashlight. This site needs more.
8292443
I'm a huge Flashlight fan too which is why I want to like this, but let's be honest. This story isn't written well.
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The lyrics of the song gave me the impression that this was the convo between two persons, thus I wrote it in pony version. And fyi, this is a scene from another Flashlight story Im working on called Forbidden love. I just teased you viewer with this scene to get your reaction to see if I should finish the story or abandon it, now I know what to do.
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Look, I'm not trying to make you feel bad. Your story does a lot right. For example, the emotions were well-captured. I just can't take the dialogue seriously. I've read one other Flashlight story with the same problem.
I say this need sequel!
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That's one of the main problems with Flashlight summed up right there: it's very hard to find a good fic for them
I hate to say it, but most of the ones that do exist always seem to me as if they were written by preteens who have little grasp on what love or romance is. It's a shame, really. I haven't read any good ones in a while... (this is not me insulting the author HERE, this is a jab at OTHER stories)
Say, have you any recommendations for good Flashlight fics? Been dying to read some for a while. Not bluecatcinema, BTW, been there read that.
Also, yeah, this is poorly written, and it doesn't exactly earn a like. BUT I also won't give it a dislike, since, like I said, I'm sure the Flashlight haters will have more than enough to give already...
Here's an idea what to do next, princesses: Go to Blueblood and find out what he thinks.
He's been raised his entire life to believe he shouldn't look for love himself because what he wants doesn't matter, the family comes first. So what if he met a mare he liked, liked very much? He is a puppet dancing on strings to fulfil the ambitions of his ancestors.
Go to him and maybe find a way to break him out of that too.
I'm going to have to agree with the sentiment that the dialogue sounds very unnatural. Also, it definitely feels like this is part of a larger story.