Hmmmm ..... I will track

Loved the previous instalment, so I'm faving this. TwiMac is best ship, though I hope this won't end in tears. Too many of that ship do (or at least seem to).

It was ver well written though and I look forward to the next chapters.

squee tracking

yep tracking this one right out the door.

So...much...D'AWWWWW

A wonderful continuation. I'm tracking and can't wait for more.

All my yes.

I feel my heart about to give out from the amount of adorableness going on here

I've been waiting for this.  Great start!

Honestly I had no idea that Sparkling Cider was your first story (I couldn't tell because it was written so well).  I'm happy you decided to write a sequel and this chapter just reaffirms that notion, already a great start and excited to read more.

>>908487908487 I'm not one for tearful endings! I'll be honest, with the way that I write, I couldn't even tell you the full ending of this one. I have an idea of where it goes, but I just let my mind think and fingers do the telling as I go along. I kind of got that bit of advice from Stephen King (if you haven't read his work On Writing, then you totally should). But yes, there may be conflict in here, but I could never leave a story on a sour note. Stick with it

And for everybody else, thanks for reading! I edited it a small bit because I left an editor's note in there and also referred to AJ as Mac's brother (thanks to Shotoman and MisterClacky for the heads up ). Like I said, work has been crazy, but when I'm on vacation in a week, I'll be able to relax and do whatever I want! So look forward to the next chapter (which is done already muahahaha).

Okay, d'aw where d'aw is due, you gave me cavities, but we didn't even get a hint about what's going to happen in the story. The chapter could stand alone as a sequel. Drop us something! O.O

Meinos Kaen

>>913627913627 Next chapter

I love a good TwiMac!   There are so few of them!

Well, I love a love of other Twi pairings too, but TwiMac is my fave het.

If you're going to mention in the description that this is the sequel to another story, you might as well link to it directly.

Copypaste this:

[url=http://www.fimfiction.net/story/31946/Sparkling-Cider]Sparkling Cider[/url]

to get this:

Sparkling Cider

Put that in the description in place of the non-linked title.

Seems pretty good to me so far. :) Hopefully the next chapter is out soon so I can read it...

I do have a question. I've noticed several people talk about tracking stories. So far I've figured out how to do that with specific authors but not with individual stories.

I loved Sparkling Cider and I can't wait for the next chapter 15 Spikes for you!

Ohhh! This is lovely I'm so happy that you came out with this...so much so that I should now go to sleep because it is four am...oh ponydom why doth they distract me! Anyway, can't wait for more.

Good lord so much D'AWW here I think the day they actually do go all the way the might just blow up the universe with their love.

Faved and watching

Haha look at that! The word count is nearly identical, and not on purpose! Anyways yes, I just finished editing this chapter. It's currently 12:30am on the East Coast, and I have to be up at 6:00. What is wrong with me. Oh right. Ponies. Enjoy the chapter! I'll probably do a more coherent, less tired edit of Chapter One as well, seeing as how I missed a few things there. And is anybody else having a TON of trouble getting Fimfiction to load? I keep getting bad gateways.

Yeah, I'm having difficulties with the site as well.

I like what you're doing but I really wish the story would pick up a little bit.  i mean, I know where you're going with this from the synopsis (or at least think I do ).  But since we haven't really "started" down that path yet, all the really nice character bits that you are giving us feel like padding.  Maybe its just a difference in style or something.

Otherwise your stuff is great, keep up the good work!

>>929353929353

Good chapter. I love Liarjack moments. So much fun.

And everybody's having problems with the site. The mods, however are fixing the problem by setting up a new server. They posted it on the Facebook page.

Alright, the ball is rolling and we're seeing the storm on the horizon getting closer.  Will Twi and Mac be able to hold out against the storm or end up being blown away?

>>929353929353 Dude this is one of if not the best twilightxbigmac fics I have ever read keep up the good work

Good good.  Love it!

Really really enjoying this one!   The worry part was amazing!

*squeals* Yes, I actually squealed at the end. Applejack's hints and uncertainties plus Big Mac's moments of silence and nervousness. I can not wait. Just remember.

"that’s a long ways off. Probably. Maybe." I am deeply loving what you're doing. I live own here in Southern Untied States as well and your accenting of the dialogue is just right.

You have gained a follower.

Have a nice day/night/twilight

Your friend,

Fallen.

Oh, sure. Two months in a relationship, it's compleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeetely safe to bring up marriage. Way to make a guy feel awkward. Also, please don't tell me this is going where I think I'm going, as in: Twilight wanting to visit these 'old fashioned relatives' who you stated never ever come around to Ponyville to try and make them accept earth pony on unicorn smex. Because that would be more than pointless, that would be stupid. Not only because it equals going to wake a sleeping dragon, but also because: two months in a relationship and you talk about MARRIAGE?! RUN, BIG MAC! RUN!

Meinos Kaen

There is so much awesome in this story it makes me want to SQEEE! :pinkie crazy:

Loving this like crazy, please update again soon!

Also, RUN BIG MAC, ABORT, ABORT GET OUT OF THER- *carrier lost*

>>930242930242 Thank you! I just write the Apples' parts like I speak. It's easy once you get used to changing "I" to "Ah," which I can miss sometimes.

This story is easily turning out to be one of my favorites. I simply couldn't stop smiling while reading it and believe me, I tried. I didn't spot any grammar errors either, but I'll admit I wasn't looking to hard.

In the end, I only want to say one thing, "Great Job and looking forward to reading more."

This is quickly becoming one of my favorite shipfics, well done! There aren't that many skillfully executed Twimac fics out there (Twimac is best ship! )...but this one is really well done, and I love it so far!

The pacing of your story itself is great, but the pacing of Twi and Mac's relationship feels a bit rushed to me. They seem far too comfortable, or far along, to be within the first two months into the relationship (With the way you described the pond scene in chapter 1, it seems more like a long-established routine), not to mention that marriage was even thought about, let along brought up. While I agree the suddenness/unexpectedness of AJ's statement was what made that little moment priceless (wow AJ, way to make the conversation awkward XD) , I do think that it would have been more realistic placed into around the end of the first year of the relationship.  At that point, the relationship still feels rather new, but thoughts of marriage and/or meeting the family would be less out of place... though mentioning them would still earn awkwardness and embarrassment, etc.

But it's not that big an issue, just me being really picky. Awesome job, great story. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Here you go:

5 twimacs out of 5

Another great chapter! :D This story is getting good now...can't wait to see what you're going to do with it.

watchingwatchingwatchingwatching

Liking this quite a lot.  Love your characterizations, and these ideas!  So interesting.

Write on!  

Brace yourselves...

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A shitstorm is coming.

One word (I think it counts a word);

Dawwwwwww

TwixMac isn't my favorite pairing but you're doing exceptionally well at writing a story about them.

A sequel to Sparkling Cider? I loved that fic! A definite read.

Wait, do ponies sweat foam?

Now this can't be good.

Great chapter though, can't wait to read more.

Shitstorm, Incoming! Twelve o' Clock high! D:

“I told him I loved him, and she said the same thing back to me.”

I am concerned.  Molestia seems to have gotten the Rule 63 raygun out again.

Oh no. This is not good I have a bad feeling about this  And I could already know I'll hate these relatives.

Ah bigoted extended family, everybody's got em.

Yay, a new chapter!  I always look forward to it!

Ehehehehe

Poor Twilight is gonna end up with a half broken heart before all this is done. Please be nice to her, she's sensitive.

>>970671970671 Whoops, fixed it! Thanks! Being at the beach doesn't necessarily help my writing skills

>>970547970547 Yes, yes they do. I'm not entirely sure how it works, but their coat foams up. Kind of weird, but that's nature

Aw yeah shit's goin down

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theres a shitstorm a comeing

>>970671970671 I think Twilight was just fantasizing about Big Macintosh as a mare.

>>971117971117 Thanks! Editing can be tough, glad I have you guys backing me up I think Microsoft word autocorrected to "breath" because my fingers got lazy. Sometimes I hate autocorrect, like when I don't catch it change.

A wizard (Love) is never late, Miss Rarity! She arrives PRECISELY when she means to!

^ what I was thinking with Flutter's statement on love. :3

"Her words caught in her throat, and she found it increasingly hard to breath." Breathe, not breath.

Aloe looked up from the paperwork she had on her desk, wondering why it was tough for her to breath at the moment.

Same as above.

ANYWAYS... Looking forward to MOAR! I mean, you know, when you get there... If you don't mind...

As I said in my comment on Sparkling Cider, I am glad I saw this in the featured box earlier.

Great story so far, and I am definitely looking forward to more.

Fantastic!  I always love a good story with ups and downs galore!

“Like, unless you were gonna become Twilight Apple.”

I literally, I mean literally, LOL'd.

Well, I made the mistake of reading this before checking if there was a prequel, so the bond between these two seems kind of forced/overbearing.  I don't think I'll be reading your first installment anytime soon, since I know how it ends.  Would you strongly recommend against that decision?  Will I find it even harder to appreciate that first story if I keep following this one?  I really want to get to the pony racism.

I can't deny though, you know how to set a scene.  Damn.  For me, it's like watching a movie and not being fond of the characters, but loving the HELL out of the mise en scene.

Owwww.

Considering that neither of my hearts have worked for at least 600 years, it was a painful surprise when they started up again for a second.

Honestly, this chapter is great.  A bit heavy on Twilight's thoughts, but it is just the first chapter.  Explosions and plot can happen later.

To tell the truth, Fluttershy/Big Macintosh is my OTP.  But this did not stop me from enjoying a great first chapter.  I will read the rest when I have more time.

Congratulations author, you have succeeded in reminding me that even machines can have feelings.

Eeeeeehgh.  I'm really hoping there's no "Twilight Apple."  Not the marriage.  That's just a stupid name.  Anyway, with so many pony names being composed of two words, and some having a space (Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash) and others without (Fluttershy, Applebloom),  I don't think changing names in marriage is practiced in Pony World.  Would be too headache inducing.  Then there's ponies with one name (Octavia, Twist)  My headcannon is that parents try to keep a theme going as new generations are born.  That's why almost all the Apple family names have "Apple" in them, yet at the beginning.  Plus, have you ever seen someone say/write "Mi Amore Armor"?  "Cadence Armor?"  Or "Shining Cadenza?"  

Man, Celestia sucker punched Twilight's brain!  

Mother's instinct I guess.

Also, I can't wait for PONY RACISM!  YEAH!!

>>973499973499 Like I say in the description, it isn't mandatory. It is good for some d'awws and whatnot. Also, it kind of shows how Twilight can freak out over relationships, so it does help explain why she was freaking out when she went to talk to Rarity. So it's up to you!

>>973539973539 Are you a Time Lord Dalek?

>>973611973611 That's actually my general thought process as well. I wrote it as "Twilight Apple" to more or less drive the point home. Also, you never really hear it referred to as the "Sparkle Family," or anything as such. The only family you really hear about is the Apple clan, and I'm only guessing it has to do with the enormity of the family, as well as the Southern roots. Another guess I have is that, just like in our world, last names only came about to distinguish people from one another (like eight guys with the name John...well, which John?), and I can't fathom any two ponies having the exact same name/cutie mark.

>>974069974069

Which John?

John's son John.

John Johnson?

Eeyup.

Don't forget names like "Cooper" or "Smith" that came from one's professions, too.

Nice story. Saw it on the front page briefly, read the preceding one. Not bad stories. Not super-terrific, either, but nice and simple for what they are.

>>971092971092

I certainly was.

I like it. :) Figured the family was coming and stuff, but now were getting to the good parts. I love this story. So far, its the only TwiMac I've read, but it is really good anyway. Looking forward to tue next chapter.

Twilight. Doesn't even make MENTION of the word marriage. Celestia still figures it out anyways.

Also:

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"Thanks, y'all."

Yay... Moar updates please,

great so far...

Ok, when I read this fic, I totally look like this.

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KEEP IT UP!

Yay! A Twimac fic! This is my absolute fav pairing! Well... right behind Derpy and Dr. Whooves, but you get the point! + FOREVER!! (also +... they really need a Whooves emoticon) Anyway, this story is awesome! Love it! Brohoof! /)

So I'm not entirely happy with this chapter. It took me forever to write. I'm not so good at writing set up chapters (at least I don't think I am, maybe this is just a different case), so I'm really looking forward to getting started on the next one. That's where the story will finally begin!

Anyways thanks for being patient while I figured this one out! Hope you enjoy, even though I think it's kind of a meh chapter!

Well done chapter. EAT THAT FIRST-ERS!

>>10486531048653

I seem to do better when I just bash it out, rather than agonize over it over several sittings.  Then again, "better" is a highly subjective term.

I'm still liking your approach here.

>>10486531048653 how can you not be happy 'bout this chapter, Twilight was having a wedding dream (something she would totally do) and we get Mac and Twilight having more d'aww couple moments and the set up works. I especially like how Big Mac is defending Twilight with the whole 'if they don't approve because of her being a unicorn then they're not worth worrying about' attitude.. can't wait for more

Dun dun dunnnnnn.

Nice use of a cliffhanger. Can't wait for the next part.

Straight shipping? Will read.

*sniff*

smells good.

Smart choice Big Mac. Considering how Twilight is going to act once next chapter comes up...

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Ah, the joys of snail mail. Looking forward to what happens next chapter

Can't wait to see Big Mac lay down the law.

Another great chapter. I like how you have these two playing out, and I think you have the charcters down to a T. I can't wait to see what happens next, but this chapter is really good, not matter what you say. At the begining, I was like...where'd the story go? They're getting married? What? And then it was just a dream. So yeah, love it, can't wait for more.

Well, it's a set up chapter so it doesn't really need to be perfect.  Its kind of like an appetizer before the main course, not filling but you can't wait for the next part.

Shit, meet fan. You're about to be very well acquainted with each other.

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>>10490121049012

I agree with what this chapter is, but I found it very entertaining.  We see what Mac and Twi just casually when they go out on the town, and it's written well.

What actually peeved me though, is if Applejack doesn't want Twilight to worry so, she shouldn't come running up to their table, out of breath, and in an obvious panic.  

LOL poor Twilight. Be kind to her in the next chapter.

I actually went "awwww" several times during this, pretty much every time Mac returned one of Twi's compliments. XD Ohhh my god this is adorable. I must have moar.

Also, I adore the use of imagery in here -- it almost feels like I'm there! Yeah, regardless of how cheesy that statement is, it's true. You have a beautiful writing style and I enjoy it profusely. One of favorite shipfics ever, and I've only read one chapter, and have had NO background info. This is polished so hard that it shines like the sun itself. Every emotion, every thought, every action is well-crafted and appealing. You're amazing.

>>10488171048817 Well thank you! What I meant was I just felt like it didn't come out as easy as the other chapters, so I guess it made itself out to me as not being as good. Glad to hear you like it

>>10489671048967 I was hoping to get some of you with that first part there

>>10490801049080 Thank you, so much! It really means a lot to me to hear this from you, a complete stranger before I began writing this. Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story I plan on having another story to write at the conclusion of this one (not another sequel, different story).

Shit is about a quarter inch away from the proverbial fan

what is going to happen!?! Great story so far! Loved the first one and this one is shaping up really well!

I don't know why, but I love the first paragraph of this chapter

very nice story, I'm not usually one for romance stories, but this is good

tracking.

I liked Sparkling Cider and I'm enjoying the sequel as well. The only critique I have is that Twilight seems a little too easily panicked and that Big Mac seems a bit too perfect (not Mary Sue level, but getting close). I'm probably just finding them a little OOC, but a solid chapter otherwise. And with that, I shall continue reading and see where this goes.

3/5 moustaches for this chapter.

(Sparkling Cider got 5/5 in case anyone is wondering.)

>>10490121049012

I agree that this chapter is a set up, but I found it very entertaining.  We see what Mac and Twi just casually when they go out on the town, and it's written well.

What actually peeved me though is that if Applejack doesn't want Twilight to worry, she shouldn't come running up to their table, out of breath, and in an obvious panic.  

Good chapter, I still think Twilight is OOC on how much panicking she's doing but the other characters seem pretty spot on. And don't worry about fluff chapters, you need them in order to get to the action. Otherwise the whole thing turns into a Michael Bay film.

I'm not sure if I like TwiMac or MacDash better

UH OH, NOT GOOD

Ohhhhhh... Dis gun b gud! Please don't keep us waiting this long this time if you can help it! (Still prefer quality over quantity, mind, but... GAH! Must... Be... Patient..)

>>10512451051245 Like them both. :) Straight shipping is such a minority in this fandom (which is very sad) that one can just group every m/f pairing together in one category and have it as "Favorite ship". It's what I do. xD

>>10520971052097

It really is a shame, isn't it? Hetero ships need some more love methinks, not that I'm hating on any other kinds or anything. Good thing we've been seeing a few more than usual lately.

CLIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFHANGERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Ah can smell it.

>>10486531048653 its actually not that bad. and i can see five or six different ways you could take the story from here.