the main character is a Pegasus colt who belongs to a noble canterlot family known for their written word and has always wanted to be a filly and one day mare. Even though he is a Pegasus he was accepted into Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns where He became friends with Twilight until she left to find the Elements of Harmony and this is his story of pain, love, acceptance and friendship. along with the suffering of being transgender and not being accepted by his father.
this story is based in an alternate reality where Twilight actually had a friend. also in this universe ponies grow up much faster. also if you give me a hooves down please leave a comment saying why.
Big thanks to littlebrony and Six String for proofreading it.
Chapters (32)
Thumbs...er hooves up!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/374086/first-last-and-only-letter
8192101 hey you read this too!
*offers hoofbump*
8192101 thank you for giving it a chance
8192226 thank you for giving it a chance
Before I read this, what is the Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
Somebody's been reading Dysphoria...
Inconsistent capitalization and punctuation. Poor spelling.
So, at the beginning of a sentence, you need to capitalize a word. You also shouldn't randomly capitalize words in the middle of a sentence without cause.
Don't randomly double space.
The word is "realization."
Is there a reason why this is written in the way that it is? I'd be a bit more forgiving if I knew you were, like, ten, if English wasn't your first language, or if you had a learning disability.
8192348 the gore tag is for the part where the main character is almost killed by his father and later on for an incident that is involved. as for how far it isn't too bad
8192460 well i did read dysphoria but this story is not based off that series at all but instead is a semi true story of my life
Does Rose have an emotionless voice?
8206878 yes she does at the end
And now the rose is complete. Such a beautiful way to help her find her true self
8206969 thank you soo much speedy
yay, cant wait for tia to smash the evil dad
8207273 glad you like it
8207273
No way! “Evil Dad” is the best webcomic ever on the Equestria Wide Web!
But if she does beat him up, before she does, she'll turn big, and green like the Incredible Pone, and say “SUNBUTT SMASH!!!”
Twilight will pass the spells test. She loves Rose very much for who she is.
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the next chapter will be up today sometime
hey everyone special birthday chapter coming 8/2
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great story. its funny my birthday is August 2nd too. I can relate to this story I never like the body I was born into. I always wanted to be a woman for as long as I can remember and I'm 27 years old.
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i know what you mean i am a female at heart but biologically i am a male. fyi this story is mostly based off of my life including the bad stuff
8369021
anyways i'm glad you like it
great update. I cant wait for more
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glad you like it there will be another chapter next tuesday
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Awesome. I'm looking forward to reading it
8382240
I'm really glad you like it. it makes me happy that somepony actually likes my story
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I know what you mean. i have a couple people that love my story. i don't know if you read it or not. its called Daughter of the night
8382370
i have only read the into so far because i have been busy however i t is really good
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ok let me know how you like the rest of it
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i just finished reading it and it is really good. a little fast perhaps on the relationship but all in all a wonderful story looking forward to more. so i would give it nine and three quarters of a star out of ten
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I know its a little fast. but thanks
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its really good keep up the good work. by the way my story Roses Broken Soul is a weekly update or bi weekly depending on how long i want to make it. for me when i write a story the story just flows out like a flood and i have to put a damn on it or the story would never end.
Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?
i don't know maybe because some ponies don't like trans stories. in my opinion and i know its biased since im the author but this is a great story
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im doing my best considering i don't have an editor. i do have a proof reader that i pm the chapter to to see if anything needed fixed but he couldn't see anything
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just a heads up i tidied up the first two chapters as best as i could and am working on the others.
>pairing OC with one of the Mane 6
why always this.
Also, if I were to make a genuine criticism, I'd say two things: get better with capitalization and for the love of Celestia write a new description. Your description is more important than your story by every metric. It is the FIRST thing people read, other than the title. If you're description is flat, boring, horribly written, and done with no care, as yours is, then you're never going to attract more readers. Sure, many people will say "well, I write because I love it, not to gain fame or attention" well, if that were the case, then you wouldn't publish it.
The second thing to mention is: what in the world is that first chapter supposed to be? There are things we do in writing, and using huge text to tell the readers what every character is like is not one of them. The film realm of creative mediums has a saying that goes; 'Show, don't tell' and the same applies for writing. Through dialogue tags and narration you should describe your characters, and continuously remind the reader how they look with little things such as; "Twilight flicked her purple bangs from her eyes" or "Fluttershy's normally yellow hooves were tarnished a shade of brown thanks to the mud in the garden".
Show, don't tell.
Other than that... I guess just keep writing and keep improving. The only way to get better is to practice, but to also never discredit the opinions of others. I myself have done that, and I can safely say its one of the biggest mistakes you can make as an author. People don't offer genuine criticism because they want to make you feel terrible or want to be a troll, they do it because they want to share their experiences with others and help out new/struggling authors, because they know what its like to start out, and they know how amazing it is to have some help along the way.
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the first chapter is basically a setup for the actual story also known as back story. i also got rid of the huge size on it. i am working on getting better at capitalization, if you would like too see my first work check out Sunset's On Destiny. it had no proofreader, no editor or anything i wrote a chapter then posted it. Surprisingly it has more likes than this one
Great chapter. Can't wait for more
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glad you liked it. will have another chapter ready next Tuesday
8409220
Ok
Loving this so far! Amazing story! This really express what Transgender is like! I can't wait to see more! Added it to my tracking/favorites and gave you a follow! :)
8410214
thank you very much
8410216
No problem! Can't wait to see more! ^.^
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it is usually up dated with a new chapter every tuesday
8410223
Awesome! I love constantly updated stories! ^.^
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mw too. also if you like sunset shimmer and human Twilight love stories feel free to check out Sunset's On Destiny
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Checking that out right now ^.^
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ok hope you like it
8394701 I did tell the author to correct the typos, grammatical errors, punctuation errors, and capialization errors (ie no capitalization where there should be, and capitalization where there shouldn't be), and even pointed out where each one was in each chapter.
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hey i tried to