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Fire-Dash


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He came in the dark of the night. An ominous figure watching from above, ready to strike at any moment.

Rainbow had been told the story as a filly. The story of the Lurker, a monstrous creature who preyed on mares late at night. It was certainly a scary thought but was it true? The young pegasus hadn't even considered it when she told the tale to Pinkie Pie one sleepless night. But when mares start to go missing, doubts settle in.

Is the legend of the Lurker really true?

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Along the same lines of "Story of the Brony"?

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I don't know. I haven't read that story.

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Ah, just read that story's synopsis. I don't think it's the same at all. The only thing that looks similar is that Rainbow Dash tells a story about a monster.
(Thank Celestia, I really didn't want to have to delete this story, I've already spent so much time on it)

885477 You wouldn't have to anyways, since it would have only shared the monster. Hardly grounds for deletion.

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I don't like sharing the same ideas, even if I didn't know it had been done before. However, after taking a look at that story, I think they are quite different. Thanks for pointing that out though.

Either I am sleep deprived, or your writing style and my writing style are a lot alike. I'm already hooked! Must follow. Want to know more.
Also, you have Pinkie down perfectly!

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Interesting, I don't come across many with a writing style similar to mine. I should check out some of your stories. :D
And thank you! I have to imagine all the lines in her voice to see if they work. Glad I got it right. :)

Hello. :pinkiesmile:

I've read your story as you asked me. Well, I have to admit, the premises of both stories are scarily alike, but the stories themselves are completely different. The monster is not the same, and although their behaviour is similar, your monster is more serious, while mine is just silly.

That's basically the main difference between the stories: yours is more serious and tragic, while my fanfic is just a little piece of silliness (an also apparently funny, according to some of the coments). And I didn't know about your story when I wrote mine, so The Legend of the Brony is not a parody of this, neither a rip-off, I assure you. It has been just a bad coincidence.

I don't think you have to delete this, and I encourage you to continue :twilightsmile: I think your writing style is very good, and your story has potential.

Again, I apologize for the bad coincidence :twilightblush:

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Thank you, I'm glad it's not too similar. (I should also read your story, as it looks pretty good).

And that's alright, you don't need to apologize. I hadn't seen your story when I started writing, it just kind of happened out of nowhere. Thank you for reading, though. I really appreciate it. :heart:

Rarity's reaction was too perfect! I nearly laughed out loud which would have been bad since my roommate is sleeping in the room next to mine. >_>

No! :pinkiegasp: Not Pinkie! :raritycry:

The story is getting more and more interesting :pinkiehappy: Good job!

Poor Pinkie! I can't wait to read more!

Remember when I said that your writing style was very good? Forget about that, your writing style is amazing :pinkiehappy: I could almost feel Rainbow's anguish in my own skin. This chapter was great.

I just hope everything goes well at the end... poor Dash :fluttercry:

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Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:

I'm working on the next chapter now. :twilightsmile:

SO MUCH SUSPENSE! :pinkiegasp:

This story has hooked me. I wonder why it doesn't have more views, it definitely should.

This is getting good...

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Well, I don't really advertise and my description could probably be better, that is, after all, what gets the reader interested. But I'm glad you like it so far. :twilightsmile:

So not the right time in my life to read this but I just have to know what happens. I'm scared for Pinkie.

I think what I love the most of this story is how perfectly you write Pinkie. She's just like in the show, always cheering others up even in the worst moments. And I really like the song, it sounds totally like something Pinkie would sing. :twilightsmile:

I wish I could write songs. I can't even write poetry...

Walking in on me while im listening to music in the dark? Now that's how you get punched in the jaw.

Thanks, everyone for reading! I'm going on vacation now, though, so I may not be able to update for a week. I will, however, keep writing while I'm away and hopefully have a few chapters to upload when I'm back.

915687 I don't know if you'll see this before going, but whatever...

Have fun in your vacation :twilightsmile: We'll be waiting for your return

Well, I'm back now! I will be updating again, I haven't had time to write as much as I'd like to, though I will hopefully be posting something tonight. I hope to keep up with my usual pace once I get back in the groove.

*shakes fist* Cliffhangers....

I love this! Great characterization, you really nailed Pinkie's personalty.

Hey, all. Sorry I haven't updated this in forever, been really busy. I promise I'll get a new chapter up soon! So sorry this is taking so long.

1198136 Don't worry, we understand. :pinkiesmile:

Take the time you need, we'll be waiting. :twilightsmile:

Well, am I ever late in updating. Been so bus with life and crap I haven't had any time! If anyone's still watching, I promise to get some new chapters up soon!

Alright, so I'm currently in the process of editing this story and hopefully polishing it up so none of those blaring errors bother me anymore. Once I finish editing, I will begin to add more chapters. Sorry for the wait.

Please update!!! Plz!:applecry::fluttershbad::pinkiesad2::raritycry:

Please, please, make more chapters!

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