You know what, just for derailing the wedding like this. Instant fav. Not sure I'll stick around for the whole story. But I at least liked this chapter.
Interesting in concept, but the white void dialogue feels very forced and expositiony. The right words are mostly there, but it all feels flat and emotionless, what with barely any narration to provide context.
Seems very forced and rather jumping the gun here, not much of a scene to paint with so much dialogue. Would have been better if this was a bit more personal between the two after such an event to be honest.
"Why would I be having a wedding with my...friend? Your brother never asked me to marry him before; we've never even been special someponies! We're just best friends and I've never even thought about him as more than that. " Cadence asked incredulously, looking as baffled as Twilight was.
Twilight Sparkle was stunned silent for a moment. "W-What!?!...s-so this means…that imposer must have mind-controlled him to make him love her! Why did she need to have a wedding with him though? I think she's just up to no good!"
The fact that later on it is mentioned she was down ther for 3 months, the fact she isn't dead is amazing.
If you read the next chapter, it's revealed that Chryssie was keeping her fed and watered, if just, and therefore alive, in those three months' imprisonment.
As the Queen was monologuing and distracted with her own victory, Twilight was able to help Cadence reach Shining Armor, cutting her binds with a spell and telling her to go to him. "Love will give you strength…"
Shining Armor shook his head firmly. "No, I know our love was real. She didn’t used any mind control on me. What Twilight saw last night really was just her helping to calm my headache that I got from maintaining that huge barrier that covered the whole city of Canterlot for so long, and that daze I've been in all day is from a lack of sleep and magical exhaustion."
"Shining Armor…I think you really did fall in love with this imposter…the Queen of the Changelings." Cadence said with a sigh, "Do you know what spell it was that I cast to gave you a strength to cast the barrier that repel all Changelings? It turns out that it was from the power of love that you held, or possibly still hold, for the fake me. Because you thought she was me…and, well…" Cadence paused as she made a realization, feeling very uneasy now.
This honestly does a better job of addressing the plot hole of Twilight being completely blindsided by her brother getting married and having no clue to whom.
"Sunshine, sunshine, ladybugs awake. Clap your hooves..." Cadence started, Twilight letting her stand up and doing the motions that went with the silly little song and dance she and Twilight always did in greeting; the one they'd done ever since they'd made it up when Twilight was just a foal, including giving Twilight a hoofbump as part of it. Something only the real Cadence would know about.
now that I think about twilight always act like a kid around her
You know what, just for derailing the wedding like this. Instant fav. Not sure I'll stick around for the whole story. But I at least liked this chapter.
This was kind of...bland? I don’t know, it just strikes me as really forced.
Interesting in concept, but the white void dialogue feels very forced and expositiony. The right words are mostly there, but it all feels flat and emotionless, what with barely any narration to provide context.
Ah, that explains the... interesting writing. Still, the concept it good, and so I will keep at it!
Seems very forced and rather jumping the gun here, not much of a scene to paint with so much dialogue. Would have been better if this was a bit more personal between the two after such an event to be honest.
The fact that later on it is mentioned she was down ther for 3 months, the fact she isn't dead is amazing.
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If you read the next chapter, it's revealed that Chryssie was keeping her fed and watered, if just, and therefore alive, in those three months' imprisonment.
Cadence is probably like "where's the broom?"
Time to find the best bug waifu.
Huh.
This story reminds me on of mine... Neat ^^
Cadence is overrated!... And evil
Heh, double twist!
As the Queen was monologuing and distracted with her own victory, Twilight was able to help Cadence reach Shining Armor, cutting her binds with a spell and telling her to go to him. "Love will give you strength…"
Do you notice the huge contradiction?
I retract my last statement.
Well, well, well. You had my attention, now you hold my interest.
This honestly does a better job of addressing the plot hole of Twilight being completely blindsided by her brother getting married and having no clue to whom.
now that I think about twilight always act like a kid around her