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An Attempt To Save A Friend

Chryslis trys to save her old friend.

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DeshLune

DeshLune #1 · Apr 23rd, 2017 · · ·

Before reading:

Chryslis trys to save her old friend.

Chrysalis tries to save her old friend.

After reading: Well, grammatical mistakes are a plenty. But as far as world building is concerned it is alright. I'll have it written within the hour. And I'll include it with the first batch of releases next month.

Anstca

Anstca #2 · Apr 23rd, 2017 · · ·

8115156 Tare it apart my good man

Anstca

Anstca #3 · Apr 23rd, 2017 · · ·

8115449 Yeah, I'll try to find an eider for anything I write in the future.

Pencil Melody

Pencil Melody #4 · Apr 24th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Almost cried. That was so good. And not to echo everyone else; but yes, you need an editor. Do you use gdocs? If so, I wouldn't mind going over this for you and editing it. Grammar is somewhat of my forte.
~Melly~

DeshLune