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Jet Storm


Writer, pre-reader and a dad to two colts and a filly.

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This story is a sequel to Somepony to Love


Spike's appreciation party has come to an end. Twilight and her friends congratulate themselves on a successful evening whilst enjoying the night sky. Gazing upon the stars, Rainbow Dash notices one shining brighter than the rest ... growing bigger ... and closer.

The star is near set on a collision course towards Ponyville, but before making landfall, it breaks apart. Its pieces scatter across Equestria, with the largest landing in Everfree Forest. Princess Celestia has sent Twilight and her friends to investigate the crash site and possible cause.

An earth pony has been found near the crater site. Having no memories to call upon, he finds himself in an unfamiliar world as he adjusts to his new surrounds and body. With the help of his new friends, this mysterious pony is on a journey of self-discovery, as he recovers his past and becomes the hero he was destined to be.

This is story is a continuation of my earlier story and a crossover.

I'd like to thank Shadowghostalex for editing my work, ShadowSpider for proof reading and LavendarRegards for prereading.

Author's notes:

There are some very light violent scenes planned.
There are also scenes injuries however they are not gruesome.

Cover art made by me. First attempt at using Krita.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 21 )

How come like no one has seen this fic
yet it's awesome so far never expected for someone to add the Japanese version of Goku

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It's probably poor advertising on my part :twilightblush:. At this moment, I am trying to focus on writing the story :twistnerd:. As I progress this story, I will advertise it more and hopefully get more people reading it :raritywink:

I know there are a lot of crossover stories here, so I wanted to do something a bit different. I thought that it would an interesting twist to the story especially when the girls are trying to figure out where he came from and who he is :rainbowderp:. Thanks for your comment though, I really appreciate the support.

This is another good chapter. I love the concept of Rarity the closet Otaku. :pinkiehappy:

Although I cannot imagine Fluttershy overcoming her social phobia enough to join the debate club, I suspect she would do pretty well in it if she could overcome her phobia (she at least feels strongly enough about Animals to have a strong opinion).

I didn’t think Rarity would be the closet Otaku of all people, but I DID expect her to be a closet cosplayer, though. I doubt that liking a book series makes a pony become a nerd, so I doubt that Rainbow Dash is a nerd. She’s still the designated dumbass jock, though.

On the other hand, I can totally see Twilight and Fluttershy being otaku, mainly because of that one nightmare night episode for the latter and the former prolly has hobbies to do other than science and engineering, I think. I still think it’s pretty cool that Sci-Twi in one universe is pretty much the mother of energy weapons.

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Originally, I had written such that Sci-Twi would be the "translator" as such, but my proofreader challenged me to do something else, hence forth why we have something different here. I agree that Rarity definitely would have fit the "closet" cosplayer but because she is a talented designer, I thought she'd easily have the ability to expand her "Otaku" nature, in drawing comics as well. Also, the costumes that some anime writers create would be very outlandish and unique that I think would appeal to Rarity.

With RD, I think in her mind, liking books still equates to being an "egg-head" and being the "proud athlete" would have been beneath her. Though, by sharing this, I had hoped to humanise RD a bit, and let Rarity open up a bit more.

The main point of the chapter in that section, was that your friends would embrace your secret hobbies and likes, no matter how embarrassing you may think they may be, because they don't fit your normal style. In a way, it's a message to myself to embrace my own closet brony. :twilightblush:

8730996 That particular passage is pretty much a shoutout to pretty much anyone with secret hobbies. I don’t really have an uber-dramatic origin story about how I got into ponies, but here i am anyway.

Update when? Seriously, After staying up to 6:00? in the morning going through manga and such online, I found this, gave it a read, got to the latest chapter, found out more than an hour have passed, and I am still craving more. Its 7:30 A.M.! Worth it!

The quality and effort put into this actually trumps Equestria Girls: Battle of the Gods by a huge margin, something that I am truly grateful for since that story desperately needs a beta reader An interesting idea yes, but there are a lot of mistakes and rushed/awkward scene-scripting that made me question why am I still reading it when I should wait until the author got some proofreading done. I plan to go back after... a month, and see if it got edited.

As for this story, there is plenty of character internal thoughts that are solid and not out of character, and the suspense from the mysteries and dilemmas you created just makes this extremely addicting. There is very few glaring mistakes if any at all, and I believe people are able to read it as a novel. This definitely earns my approval!

Hey, it's me Goku! Looks like I don't need to talk to myself anymore! Twilight seems to have finally found a way for us to chat things out right too! Maybe I can figure out how to get my body back and fast! I'm getting really hungry and it's hard to eat anything at all with these strange hooves! Next on Dragon Ball Super! " Greetings are made! Conversing with the strange pony at last!!" Don't Miss it!

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Thanks for the feedback. I've been a bit slack in progressing on this story. I've had a terrible bout of writer's block. But after such a ringing endorsement, it certainly has got my muse roused.

Having said that however, the next chapter won't be released soon, unfortunately. The reason is because I am engaging an artist to work on a couple of scenes, which also means further reworking on some previous chapters. I'm also planning to release three chapters side by side as a couple of things need to be fleshed out a bit.

Vale mucho la pena tu historia bro espero que la continues :pinkiehappy:

"What? I'm just sayin'," Pinkie Pie replied defensively.

(Facepalm) DAMMIT!

This is really good so far, but why is Goku speaking in Japanese? All I can hear when reading Goku's lines is Masako Nozawa's voice droning on and on and it is so annoying

So Goku lost himself to the rage of losing Krillian in this version.

Thank god Twilight thought of the human world

I really do hope this gets picked up again, loving the concept of the language barrier.

Aww :( that was getting really interesting

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