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Insomnia

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Twist is having some trouble sleeping. Unfortunately, she has a lot on her mind.

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Cinder Vel

Cinder Vel #1 · Mar 10th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Interesting story though perhaps a bit slow. Regardless I liked the seeing thoughts of a character that was sidelined and forgotten, think everyone at some point of life felt that way and unfortunately for some it lasted longer than for others. The character you picked is good choice even though she suffers in fandom well from things that keep her awake at night. Though on the other hand she is very insightful for being a small kid.

As for grammar and sentence structure I am not really qualified but some things really feel off and you could probably use a proofreader next time (if you do not have one).