Betrayed... Abandoned... Exiled. Once Twilight was the princess of friendship and a beloved figure of Equestria. But one day, the galactic republic arrives and Twilight is determined to create a friendship between Equestria and the republic but an assassination attempt to Celestia leads to her exile and sends her and her trusted allies Tempest Shadow and Flash Sentry to the clone army. As time went on as Twilght, Flash and Tempest gave the clone army victories in multiple battles, fate leads the three heroes and the republic back to Equestria where the brave heroes are in a race to search for a long hidden treasure before the Empire can find it.
This story is inspired by Star wars republic commando Equestria Commando but is different in every way. Also, I want to thank you guys for all the support during my families problems with my sisters ex husband. Anyway, enjoy the story and more chapters will be up soon.
A little rushed, but you have my attention.
what happened to all the chapters
Very rushed and a lot of words written that were not needed. It might be good to ask around for someone to help proof read this, wether someone on this site or someone you know irl. I love this concept and really hope you can work through the problems it’s got right now
YES YES YES GOD DAMN YES
OKAY THIS IS WAY MORE BADASS THAN THE ORIGINAL!
At least this prologue is much more better than the last one; not to mention that Flash and Tempest are also helping Twilight rescue Rex than rather letting her do it alone.
Awesome rewrite I can't wait for more. Good work, I take it they still are normal ponies and not anthro?
Wtf?
(grabs sniper, takes aim, fires at Celestia's head) Never underestimate those who never miss, (bleeps)(bleeps)face.
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Celestia sure acts like a total bitch for not having faith in Twilight anymore.
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More than that. She overreacted. In banishing Twilight to Tartarus, she breaks the bonds of the Elements of Harmony. Therefore, crime, corruption, acts of war, violence, disharmony, and chaos will rise. It'll be a thousand years before the Elements choose new barers.
Wait, so since Equestria is technically corrupted now, does this mean that they're gonna join the Separatists?
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Also, what do you think it was Celestia did for Twilight to try and assassinate her? There's gotta be a reasonable answer for it.
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If I remembered correctly, they did mention that one of Celestia's generals was secretly plotting to frame Twilight by having one of Chrysalis' soldiers do the dirty work unnoticed in the previous story.
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I suppose that would make some sense.
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I was thinking that Flash Sentry could be a key witness that spotted the changeling assassin before Celestia was attacked. Yet, he failed to reason with the Princess when it was too late. I can't imagine something like this at Twilight's Trial:
Flash Sentry (gasped after seeing Twilight get taken away): Princess, with all due respect......
Celestia (in anger): DO YOU WANT TO BE NEXT?!!!!!
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Did you just make a reference to the 2017 version of Beauty and the Beast?
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Also, do you think Spike and Grubber helped free Twilight as well?
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I can't say for sure; that will be up to the author for him to decide.
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Right. Ten bucks says Sideous gets involved and exposes the general.
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Hey, man, how long do I have to wait for a story to be approved.
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It all depends if the story has meet the criteria in fimfiction.
Wait, what happened to spike? Is he also a trooper, or is he still with the rest of the main 5?
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Yeah. Hey, awesomeavenger, if you are still alive, clap three times!
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Calm down. I'm alive. I currently working on the chapter right now. I just trying to figure out how the space battle between the repubic and separatists plays out. Just give me time. ALso mostly because I've been busy with other story projects at the moment.
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Optimus Prime lives! I think...
"Do you want to know who's a more bigger fool than I am, Celestia?!" Twilight snarled as she turned to face her ex-mentor and her ex-family. "Do you want to know who's a bigger fool than me?! PONIES LIKE YOU!!!!"
Startling Celestia, Shinning, and the other two alicorn princesses, Twilight immediately teleports herself again away from them and this time, she reappeared right behind Rainbow Dash. Before she could see it coming, Twilight uses her vibroblades with her magic, while hovering herself with her levitation spell, to cut both of Rainbow Dash's wings from her body before the latter screamed in pain with blood gushing out from both of her sides before crashing straight into the ground. The moment Twilight landed on all four hooves, disengaging her levitation spell, she slams Applejack to a nearby wall with her magic before stealing her hat. After that, Twilight slams the butt of her blaster rifle into Applejack's nose, knocking the earth pony out.
After taking down Rainbow and Applejack, Twilight charges forward at the of the Mane 5 and did the unthinkable. She cuts off Fluttershy's tail, destroys Pinkie's party cannon, and cut off Rarity's horn out of anger for not defending her at her trial. Before they could say anything, Twilight starts using Rainbow's words against the Mane 5 and Shinning Armor, resorting to drill sergeant ranting in front of the them as if they don't deserve their roles anymore, and immediately teleported all of them straight to Tartarus, giving them a taste of their own medicine.
After the mane 5 and Shinning Armor disappeared in an instant, Celestia, Luna, Cadence, and all of the Pillars of Equestria stood there with horror and confusion in their eyes as Twilight goes back to Rex as she teleports herself and her commanding officer away from Canterlot, disappearing from the execution grounds for good.
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I can. I can see it with Sunset during the whole Anon-A-Miss incident.
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Why would you think that Shinning Armor and the Mane 5 would let Celestia get away with her overreacted behavior, than rather help Twilight prove her innocence, whether or not she ran away from Equestria??
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Because they aren't worthy of being her friends or family. The death that Brachy got in Fallen Kingdom, is the death they deserve.
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Slow down. Everything will be revealed in due time. For now, be patient.
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He's alive again...
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If Spike was with the Mane 5, he probably will never speak to them again. He might even try to find Twilight after she escaped and leave Equestria with her, breaking up with Rarity for good.
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He could even go all NYSC-whatever the final letter is on her too.
When is the next chapter?
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*in caveman voice* You write. update story. *proceeds to make ape noises*
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Very funny.
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Well are you going to update soon? If not at least I got a laugh out of you.
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Don’t worry. More chapters are on the way. I guarantee.
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And I also got a laugh out of you to boot.
Give Twilight some ice Jesse.
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Too Soon
I ment Jesus
Update pls?
how exactly does one become a clone.
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Under galactic law Mandalorians can take “foundlings” into their clans. Officially the clones species is Mandalorian
please continue
Equestria is so f******** retarded to think they can make war against the Galactic Republic. A Republic that has TENS OF THOUSANDS of worlds, the Jedi Order, the Clone Army, and the Republic Armada of ships against their one/single pathetic planet!
What's stopping OP Characters like Anakin Skywalker, Obi-wan, Mace Windu, or even Yoda himself to kick their entire asses?!
Twilight singing this in 19 years: