"Where am I?"
"...Wait a minute, isn't this the FIMfiction.com Website? Am I a displaced? Ah Crap..."
"Well if we're gonna be spending some time together might as well get straight to the point."
"Name's Sans, not the skeleton. Kinda ironic that Sans means without in French, the language that the game OFF came from."
"Anyhow that name to me is dead, for I now bare the face of a powerful beast named 'The Batter'."
"Anyhow I bet you know I'm going to THAT world..."
"Actually it's the other side Sans."
"Wait are you talking about that High School Musical Human Dimension?"
"Yes"
"Ah Crap..."
Anyway I believe your time here is spent 'Batter'...
"So I'm not gonna remember this will I?"
Nope.
"Well if that's the case, can you at least tell me who'll end up with romantically?"
...Fine...
(Whispers)
"...I freaking knew it!"
Takes place after the 1st movie and before Rainbow Rocks.
OFF is owned by Mortis Ghost
HOME is owned by Felix The Judge (RIP: Felix)
CONTINUE STOP RISE is owned by M-256/Isasapiens.
Spoilers for all 3 games and more fangames ahead.
Rated T for light to medium swears , light gore, some sexual innuendo, and sexual references.
What is OFF? Who is Batter?
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Here watch this to get a basic idea of what OFF is
8117552 i like the story keep it up
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I will, heck I'm posting a chapter as we speak
8120499 YAY!!!!!!1!!!I1!
AwESME ChAPeR :)
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Thanks
8120758 i TaLK liK TEM
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H0i I'm Temmie.
Though sad you don't have a displaced story of your own, or any stories posted for that matter.
8121468 yeah i have been thinking about it but i'm just not really a writer. then again i might have a story in mind maybe.
Good so far dude. I think I might actually like this story.
Nice choice in character by the way.
P.S. - Funny as intro bro
Ha ha. Brute Force is a fucking retard.
5hp
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Thanks for the comments, I was actually gonna have him with 1 HP, but 5 made more sense for a guy called "Brute Force"
Hi
My only complainments is that it's a little rushed, the Displaced learned about his powers too quickly, didn't freak out much about fading away, he react a bit to calmly, he somehow learned that he's a Displaced without being told or founding out how he figured it out, the fight-scenes were a weak in detail, the girls didn't freak out much about a ghost suddenly coming out of bully, the lack of reaction from the mane six seeing that a STUDENT brought a bat as a weapon to school, anyone seeing him attacking would of reported him to the principle of using said bat, and last when he used his rings, they didn't react to seeing them glow or whatever, etc. Last, he accepted the sudden "pulled into another whole" concept and went with the flow as if he was expecting it.
The story has potential if you'd slow down a bit and try to be more detailed.
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Let me explain.
He played OFF before, so he had a basic understanding of his Powers.
He's heard stories and had known something might happen to him someday (Which I'll reveal later)
The fight was short because The Batter's stronger stat wise.
They seen Sunset turn into a freaking SHE-DEMON an and made friends with a unicorn/Alicorn princess and a Dragon turned Dog. They'd even turned into a pony human fusion and fired a rainbow blast. So they wouldn't be that surprised about it.
But I see your logic in the ghost, I'm gonna fix it.
I'll be getting to the Bat and Add-Ons thing soon.
I appreciate the concern and criticism. I'll do my best to make the story improve.
So sit back, relax, and let this whole thing flow through. I'll be getting more into his personality later on.
8133629 Understandable, but the guy should atleast worry about his family and how they're worried about his sudden dissapearance.
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I'm getting on to that in the next chapter acually
8134128 Forgive me if I sounded picky at those details, it just bothers me sometimes.
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(Sorry this is late was busy writing)
Is that supposed to be a reference to Pinkie's reaction?
You might want to re-read the chapter, there are a alot of parts you forgot to edit, mostly the parts where you didn't replace "I" with "He" among other things.
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Fixed, also what's your opinion on the music I chose to use here?
8175893 Good choices.
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Thanks. :)
Fun Fact: Right Here it says OFF INSPIRED Undertale
8175900 Oh! By the way, I'll be crossing over with a certain prson and told her about ya, I believe you guys should do a cross-over. A friend of a friend, is a friend of mine afterall, plus I can see some a tiny bit of humor added when she pokes fun at your Displaced's name. :p Her names Black night Sun but her story is on Raze's account due to site complications.
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Can I have the link?
I'm curious about this displace.
8175943 https://www.fimfiction.net/story/372035/chara-and-oc-adventures-in-equestrias
10/10
good story
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Thanks
The last line shows something else, something not good is going to happen. I just hope Sans won’t succumb to the Batter’s true will. (IF he is there.)
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So I guess you've played or at seen OFF.
Anyway, I'll guess we'll have to see.
Things are going a bit quickly don't you think
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Sorry, I needed to introduce something important to The Batter's arsenal, writing for every single short would take forever, and lastly I haven't written anything for the plot in a while so forgive my quickness, trust me I just wanted things to be moving along.
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I fully understand It's still fun to read
Ps. I got so curious that I watched the the whole play through of the game by markiplier
more please as soon as you can manage.
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Heh, I recommend playing some of the various fangames on it as well.
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I'll try amigo. I'll be updating a bit more frequently now.
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Thank you friend my other major stories I read are slowing way down so I was hoping you would say that.
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You're welcome, but forgive me if that does happen to me. I might be catching up on a few fanfics I like on this site.
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That is perfectly understandable.
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Thanks
Take your time. We all know what happens to Rushed stories right?
This story went quiet but to continue it have him deal with something like romance issues or get a party member in sunset shimmer.
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I'm sorry was busy all summer helping my friends out with Crossovers.
we could do with more OFF x-overs
maybe try writing a pony one?
and with the actual characters?
I do hope you'll listen to my pleas...
Your pacing is slightly off. You might want to pad out a few scenes, I recommend an editor and a thesaurus/dictionary.
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Sorry, But I rushed this out to get in order to get the update out since I didn't want anyone thinking I'm cancelling it.
I have been thinking of doing a non-canonical spinoff of The Batter, the mane 6, spike, starlight, sunset celestia, and luna reacting to Markiplier's Playthrough of OFF
Oh God, he is turning into The Batter, and his brother will try to kill him without knowing that the batter is his brother