I really liked the first half, and the kissing scene was cute, but the moment you got to the sex and cunnilingus, I just have to say: THAT IS REPULSIVE! HOW CAN A PERSON WRITE SOMETHING LIKE THAT!?

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I would advise not reading the second half then. I tried to end this chapter on a relatively tame, and a bit of a blue-ball note. Act 2? Not so much.

Also there's a porn tag right there at the top. I don't know what you expected.

Great first chapter I really enjoyed the idea of Discord and Celestia having a secret friendship that followed of course more feelings. It makes all that happened at the end that much more tragic.

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It's not exactly steeped in canon, but it's a compelling and plausible enough idea. It's definitely consistent with Celestia's character. Before Twilight showed up she pretty much never got to keep anyone she cared about.

I hope you enjoy the second chapter as much as the first.